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The map shows the present layout of an office building and plans for its future redevelopment.

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The maps illustrate the present office building and how it will change in the future.
Overall
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, the office building becomemore modern. Some areas will be changed. The kitchen and canteen will be replaced by
offices
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 ,
while
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 new outdoor seating and
meeting
Correct article usage
a meeting
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 area will
added
Verb problem
be added
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.
However
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,
storeroom
Correct article usage
the storeroom
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 and main entrance will stay the same. At present, there is a large entrance in the
center
Change the spelling
centre
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 of the building. Four
offices
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 are located at the bottom. At the top, there are a kitchen, a canteen and a storeroom. There is
also
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 grass on both sides of the building, and the main entrance is at the bottom. In the future, the kitchen and canteen will be changed into two
offices
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, but
storeroom
Correct article usage
the storeroom
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 will remain in the same place.
the
Capitalize the word
The
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 grass on the left side will become an outdoor seating area with chairs. On the right side grass will be replaced by a meeting area.
In addition
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, a coffee machine will be placed below them. The number of
offices
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 will not change.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words offices with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 4 times.
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