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Some people claim that not enough of the waste from homes is recycled. They say that the only way to increase recycling is for governments to make it a legal requirement. To what extent do you think laws are needed to make people recycle more of their waste?

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Recycling waste from homes is not sufficient. The primary part of society thinks that the only way to increase recycling is for governments to make it a legal requirement.
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 essay does not completely agree with
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 statement because refraining is not the sole way to solve that problem. There are additional reasonable options to do it,
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 as raising awareness about it. Most people cannot realise the significance of recycling, which is why they do not take care of the environment .
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 to say, irresponsibility leads to increasing pollution and damage to the Earth. If the government demands the nation recycle its waste, they start to become more careful.
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, in Germany, where the government encourages the crowd to recycle plastic bottles, pollution is going to decrease
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 the rate of recycling is going to increase.
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, society is forced to recycle its garbage and commercial waste
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, the authority should encourage communities to pay more attention to reproduction.
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, if the authorities impose fines on individuals, the population will never understand that reproduction is crucial for them, and they continue to pollute
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 if they understand that it is significant, they prefer to be more careful with the environment. So, the government should raise awareness of why recycling is vital for their future. By way of conclusion, I believe that the advantages of encouraging outweigh the drawbacks. If the Authorities allocate more money for promoting, definitely, Societies will broaden their perspective about the environment and collaborate with them.
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, I think that the public can help by launching a campaign to attract more individuals to join these kinds of groups.

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Score: 5. Your answer is on the topic, but your view is not fully clear. Say clearly how far you agree. For example: “I partly agree that laws are needed, but education and easy recycling systems are also important.”
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Develop each main idea more. Explain how a law would work, such as fines, home waste bins, or rules for sorting paper, glass, and plastic.
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Your Germany example is too general and uses future tense. Write what happens now: “In Germany, bottle return schemes have helped raise recycling rates.”
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Do not use “reproduction” here. It means having babies. Use “recycling” instead.
coherence and cohesion
Score: 5. Your paragraph order is good, but some ideas do not link well. In paragraph 2, move from laws to the Germany example in a clearer way.
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Use one main point in each body paragraph. Paragraph 1 can be about why laws work. Paragraph 2 can be about why awareness and support also work.
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Some sentences are too long and unclear, especially in paragraph 3. Break them into two or three short sentences.
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Keep key words the same. Use “government”, “people”, and “recycling” instead of changing them to “authority”, “crowd”, “nation”, or “reproduction”.
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Your conclusion should repeat your exact view. It should say that laws are useful, but they should be used with education and good recycling services.
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You give a clear view: laws can help, but they are not the only answer.
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You give two main ideas: rules and public awareness.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear introduction, two body parts, and a conclusion.
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You use linking words such as “For example”, “On the other hand”, and “By way of conclusion”.
Your opinion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Waste management
  • Recycling
  • Sustainability
  • Mandatory
  • Voluntary
  • Legislative measures
  • Environmental impact
  • Public awareness
  • Regulation
  • Sanctions
  • Compliance
  • Recycling facilities
  • Consumer behavior
  • Waste reduction
  • Resource conservation
  • Circular economy
  • Eco-friendly
  • Biodegradable
  • Landfill
  • Global initiative
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