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The table below provides information about the results of 2 survey conducted in 1980 and 2010 regarding resident’s opinions about six aspects of city life in some cities.

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The given table provides information about the results of 2 survey conducted in 1980 and 2010 regarding
resident’s
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residents’
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 opinions about six aspects of city life in some cities. The data are measured in percentages.
Overall
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, it is clear
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that the
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 highest proportion of positive
rating
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ratings
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 was recorded by education,
while
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 transport was viewed
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as the
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 least satisfactory aspect. Observing in detail, in 1980, healthcare received the highest rate of positive
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, accounting for 82%. There is a similar figure in the education and the environment, representing 72%. Shops and employment were rated 64% and 62%, respectively. Transport recorded the lowest level of satisfaction, with 52%,
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 it
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 had the highest proportion of
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negative
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, making up 32%. Turning to 2010, education showed the largest rate, which constituted 82%. The rate of
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employment was increased to 72%,
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 the proportion of neutral
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 fell sharply from 22% to 5%.
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, positive ratings of healthcare decreased from 82% to 74%, and the figure for environment declined slightly to 71%. Satisfaction with the shops declined, from 64% to 60%. Transport experienced the most considerable deterioration, with positive
responses
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 dropping from 52% to39%,
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 the negative opinions
ascended
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increased
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 from 32% to 38%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 93%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words responses with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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