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The bar chart below shows current health expenditure totals as percentages of GDP* for various European countries for the years 2002, 2007 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,

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The bar graph illustrates
health
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cost
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costs
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 in proportion
of
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to
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 gross domestic product in twelve different
europian
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European
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 countries during three
years
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 (2002, 2007 and 2012).
Overall
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,
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switzerland
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Switzerland
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 has the highest
overll
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overall
 cost for
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health
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the health
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 sector in all
years
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,
while
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Estonia
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 has the lowest percentages among them all.
Whereas
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 four
othe rcountries
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other countries
 ( Belgium,
Estonia
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, Spain and
Switzerland
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) stayed the same in all these
years
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,
other
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others
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 showed two or three different percentages during these
years
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.
Switzerland
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 stood at the first with the same proportion around 12%, and Belgium
with
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 10% of all
health
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expenditure
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expenditure,
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 was in the second place in the evaluated time. In
comparison
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Estonia
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 has the lowest
peroption
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proportion
 of
health
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cost
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costs
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, which is only 3%.
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also
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Also
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, Denmark, Lithuania, Norway,
Slovenia
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and Slovenia
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 followed an increasing trend from 2007 to 2012,
while
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Luxamburg
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Luxembourg
 and
Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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 had a decreasing figure. Belgium,
Estonia
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, Spain and
Switzerland
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 remained the same in these three
years
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,
in
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contrast
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contrast,
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 France and
Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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 had a fluctuating pattern.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words health, years, switzerland, estonia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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