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The chart shows the total distance travelled by passengers on five types of transport in the UK between 1990 and 2000

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The graph illustrates the distance travelled using five different modes of transport in the UK between 1990 and 2000.
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,
it is clear that
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 the majority of people are inclined to use the
bus
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 and the rail transports frequently,
while
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bicycle
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bicycles
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,
motorbike
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motorbikes
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, and
air ways
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airways
 were
utuilisied
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utilised
 less. Looking at the details, the
bus
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 and the rail showed a similar pattern throughout the entire period.
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, around 45
billion
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kilometers
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kilometres
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 accounted for the
bus
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 transport in 1990, but increased slightly in
coming
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the coming
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 years.
Additionally
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,
this
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 indicator instituted 40
billion
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kilometers
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kilometres
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 on the rail transport
initially
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, and stood at the same point on the
bus
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 category. In terms of
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apply
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 the same development witnessed on the bicycle and the motorbike transfer.
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, approximately 10
billion
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kilometers
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kilometres
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 consisted of
for
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both sectors
in
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at
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 the beginning of
period
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the period
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, before dipping slightly to 9
billion
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 in the ultimate time.
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, the ratio
on the
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of
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 air transfer amounted to 8
billions
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billion
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, and
this
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 index peaked at 10
billion
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 in 2000.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words bus, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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