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The chart below gives information about the number of households with high-speed broadband Internet connections in five countries in 2001 and 2002.

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The given bar chart provides information about the
number
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 of households with high-speed broadband internet
connections
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 in five countries in 2001 and 2002,
while
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 the table illustrates the percentage increase over the same period.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the
USA
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 and South
Korea
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 recorded the highest numbers of broadband
connections
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 in both years,
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 Germany and Switzerland showed the lowest numbers.
Although
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 every country experienced growth, Britain and the
USA
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 recorded the most dramatic increases,
while
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 South
Korea
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 showed the smallest ascent. Observing the bar chart in detail, the
USA
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 showed the highest
number
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 between 2002 and 2001, with their respective figures being 245,3 and 91. The
number
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 of houses with high-speed internet
connections
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 in South
Korea
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,
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 which represented 154,4 and 132 in 2002 and 2001, respectively. The
number
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 in Switzerland and Germany was almost similar and low. There was a considerable difference in the index of Britain, accounting for 33,50 and 9,53, from 2002 to 2001, respectively. Turning to the changes, broadband
connections
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 had increased in all five countries. Britain recorded the greatest percentage increase, at 230%, followed by the
USA
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 with 170%. Switzerland and Germany experienced rises of 120% and 80%, respectively.
By contrast
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, South
Korea
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 showed the smallest growth, with an increase of just 20%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 85%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, connections, usa, korea with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 5 times.
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