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Some people says that work alone is easier and others prefer to work as a team. Which do you prefer? Give reasons and examples to justify your opinion.

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Some people believe that working alone is smoother and more productive,
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 others choose to work as a
team
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. In my opinion, I believe working freely is effective and easy. With
this
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 essay, I will provide examples to support my point of view In the first place, independence on task is the best way to organise your
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 in a day.
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 is because all tasks will be relied on just one person, which means they can save time to meeting or discussing before
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 on jobs.
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, for the latest survey conducted by Workers Service Company, 70% percent of voters have an increasing tendency to be happy to work on their own
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 saving more time and not needing to catch up on unnecessary meetings.
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, working as a
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 does not seem to be a drawback. Workers care more about dividing the workload. Some of the places share tasks to invidividual unequally among individuals and do not give fully protiential to contribute work-loads which be provided.
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, the new generation in
this
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 industry will run as individuals.
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, fresh graduates tend to work from home more than onsite
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team
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 environment. They feel free to manage and do not need to rely on someone. Some of the new starters think working on-site with the
team
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 might bring some stress and depression if they do not do well. In conclusion, working as a group or an individual
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 pros and cons. I strongly believe working as a person will make me more productive, easier and well-organised.

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Score: 5. Your main answer is clear, but some ideas are not fully explained. Say more about why working alone makes you more productive. For example, explain how you can make your own plan, work at your own speed, and make fast choices.
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The second main part is not clear. You start by saying team work is not a drawback, but then you mainly give bad points about it. Make the point clear: team work can cause slow work when people must wait for others or go to many meetings.
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Your examples need to feel more real and clear. The survey example has no clear source, and the example about new workers does not strongly show that working alone is better. Use one simple, direct example from school or work.
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Avoid saying “With this essay, I will provide examples”. Start with your answer and main reasons instead. For example: “I prefer working alone because it saves time and gives me full control of my work.”
coherence and cohesion
Score: 5. Put one clear main idea in each body part. Body 1 can be about saving time. Body 2 can be about control and less stress. Then explain each idea and give one example.
coherence and cohesion
Some links between ideas are hard to follow. For example, “However” is not used well because the next part does not give a balanced good point about team work. Use “On the other hand” when you show the other view, then say why you still prefer working alone.
coherence and cohesion
Use a simple plan: introduction; reason 1 with example; reason 2 with example; conclusion. This will make your answer easier to read.
coherence and cohesion
In the conclusion, do not add new ideas. Restate your choice and your two main reasons in simple words.
task response
You give a clear view: you prefer to work alone.
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You give reasons and examples, such as saving time and having more control.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has an introduction, two main parts, and a conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
You use some linking words, such as “In the first place”, “However”, “For example”, and “In conclusion”.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • work independently
  • work as part of a team
  • share responsibilities
  • divide the workload
  • exchange ideas
  • different perspectives
  • solve problems efficiently
  • learn from others
  • mutual support
  • team members
  • effective communication
  • reach a decision
  • meet a deadline
  • coordinate tasks
  • individual strengths
  • group project
  • unequal contribution
  • personal accountability
  • increase productivity
  • complex tasks
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