You have found an advertisement by an Australian couple who are looking for someone to teach your language to their daughter for a year. Write a letter to the parents. In your letter: • explain why you believe you are a good fit for the job • say what other help you could offer the family • describe why you want the job You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear ..........,

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and
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Donaman, I am writing
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letter to express my interest in your job advertisement where you are looking for
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someone who
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French to your daughter for one year. I am an expert French teacher with five years
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of experience
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in writing, speaking and
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a range of
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of
French
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language. I am currently working at a language school, and I
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give private classes to my students. My former students, whom I have
tought
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French, took a French exam, and they
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very good scores.
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, I graduated from a well-known Sports Institution in Montreal, enabling me to work as a personal trainer. I could
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assist your daughter in improving her physical activities and teach several
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she might like to do. Learning
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and exercise would be beneficial for her development
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year. I have always wanted to visit Australia, and I want to move there for one year to discover a new culture and meet new people.
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opportunity would give me a positive effect on my career development, leading me to
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myself in a new environment. I would really appreciate it if you could check my profile and resume, and give me a chance to introduce myself in an online meeting. I could
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provide extra information if requested. Thank you for your time and consideration. I am looking forward to your response. Yours sincerely, Ibrahim

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Give more direct detail about teaching their daughter. For example, say how often you can teach and what you will do in class.
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The part about sport is useful, but say more about how it can help the family, not only the daughter.
coherence and cohesion
The third paragraph has too many different ideas: sport, language, Australia, culture, and career. Split it into two paragraphs.
coherence and cohesion
Make the link between ideas smoother. For example: “In addition to teaching French, I can also help your daughter with sport.”
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You answer all three parts: why you are right for the job, other help you can give, and why you want the job.
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Your letter has a polite and formal tone. The ending is clear and kind.
coherence and cohesion
Your ideas are in a clear order: teaching, extra help, then your reasons for going to Australia.
coherence and cohesion
You use linking words such as “Furthermore” and “also” to join ideas.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite
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