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You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In your letter describe the situation explain your problems and why it is difficult to work say what kind of accommodation you would prefer

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to inform you about some problems
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 I am having with my current
room
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 arrangement in the college dormitory. I am living in
room
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 I share with another student. Unfortunately, the situation is very difficult for me. My roommate has friends over almost every evening, and they make a lot of noise by talking loudly and playing music until late at night. On top of that, he often leaves his things all over my
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 of the
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, so it is very
untidly
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untidy
. Because of these problems, I find it
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very
 hard to study
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 exams. I cannot
concentate
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concentrate
 on my homework when there is so much noise.
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, I am not getting enough sleep, which makes me feel very tired during my morning
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classes
. My grades are
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starting
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 I would really appreciate it if you could move me to another
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. I would
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prefer
 to have a single
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 can study in peace. Yours faithfully, Topala Dumitrita

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task response
You answer all parts. To get a higher score, say more about why a single room will help you work and sleep well.
coherence and cohesion
Your ideas are in a clear order: the room, the problems, the effect, and your request. Use a few more link words, such as "because" and "therefore", to show the links between ideas.
task response
You clearly tell the officer what is wrong and ask for a single room.
coherence and cohesion
Each part has one main idea, and the letter has a good start and end.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • accommodation officer
  • roommate
  • share a room
  • living arrangement
  • difficult to work
  • noise levels
  • study environment
  • privacy concerns
  • alternative accommodation
  • single room
  • academic performance
  • well-being
  • respectfully request
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