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The graph compares the rate of smoking in men and women in Someland between the years 1960 and 2000. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information in the graph below. The graph compares the rate of smoking in men and women in Someland between the years 1960 and 2000. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information in the graph below.

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The graph below shows the comparisons of smoking men and women in
some
Correct determiner usage
a
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 country between 1960 and 2000. As we can see, the number of smoking males was much higher in 1960, but after that it gradually began decreasing till 2000 when it became equal
as
Change preposition
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 the rates of women.
Meanwhile
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Meanwhile,
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 the number of smoking females started rising in 1960 over the following 20 years, and it
also
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was falling down
Wrong verb form
fell
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 to 2000.
Overall
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, the male side went through
decrease
Correct article usage
a decrease
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.
when
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When
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 women experienced both an increase and a decrease.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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