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Band 5.5

You recently moved to a new apartment and are facing some problems. Write a letter to the landlord. Explain the problems Say what you want the landlord to do State when you would like the issues to be fixed

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Dear Abhi, Hope all is well
for
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 you. I am the new tenant who moved
in
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into
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 your apartment
last
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 week
and
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 I
writing
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 to inform you about several issues we are facing right now. To commence with, we recently
realized
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 that the lock of the backyard door is not working properly.
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 we tried
best
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 on our end to fix it before mentioning it to you,
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however
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apply
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we failed in solving the issue. Another major problem is that one of the bedroom's AC
vent
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vents
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 is not working, so it does not cool down. To resolve
this
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, it would be really appreciated if you
send
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some
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 professional to do an inspection of the house.
Also
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, they can take all the necessary actions
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such
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, such
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 as replacing any parts or fixing it mechanically.
Furthermore
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,
due to
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 family security and privacy concerns
the
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 back door can be kept as
priority
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a priority
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,
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 I would request an urgent fix for that.
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, the AC vent issue could be handled at a later date at your earliest convenience. I look forward to hearing back from you on
urgent
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 basis. Yours faithfully, Swapnil Parekh

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task response
Score: 7. You answer all parts well. Say a clear time, such as 'Please fix the door lock by Friday.' This will make your request stronger.
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Use a more formal start. Write 'Dear Mr Abhi,' or 'Dear Sir or Madam,' not 'Dear Abhi'.
coherence and cohesion
Score: 7. Your ideas are in a good order. Use simple links like 'First,' 'Also,' and 'Finally,' instead of long phrases.
coherence and cohesion
Make some lines shorter. For example: 'The AC vent in one bedroom does not work. The room does not get cool.'
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You explain both problems clearly: the back door lock and the AC vent.
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You say what you want the landlord to do and give a clear order of need.
coherence and cohesion
The letter has a clear start, main part, and ending.
coherence and cohesion
Each main part has one clear point, so it is easy to follow.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • apartment
  • problems
  • water leak
  • ceiling
  • damp
  • mold
  • health
  • heating system
  • cold
  • chilly
  • comfort
  • electricity
  • lights
  • flicker
  • daily activities
  • kitchen sink
  • clogged
  • dishes
  • prepare
  • food
  • routines
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