You recently moved to a new apartment and are facing some problems. Write a letter to the landlord. Explain the problems Say what you want the landlord to do State when you would like the issues to be fixed

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Dear
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Raj, I am writing
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letter to express my dissatisfaction
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experienced moving into your apartment 213
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flour
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. I moved here
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days ago
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and suddenly the water stopped coming
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the kitchen
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it inconvenient because
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have to bring the water from
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to wash my dishes.
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,
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noticed some paint is
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peeling off from the walls
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makes it even more
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uncomfortable
to stay here. I would really appreciate
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you could arrange a plumber to fix the tab and could
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sent
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the painters to paint the inside walls. I would manage to stay next door for one day
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doing their work. I
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prefer
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to be done on
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since it is my day off and
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can move some of my personal stuff to my neighbour's apartment. Plus i can help them as well to some extent if
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at home
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the work
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be finished
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. I will be waiting to hear from you soon. Your sincerely, Manpreet kaur

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Score: 6. All parts are there, but make the request more direct. Say that you need the work finished this weekend, not only that you prefer it.
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Use a more formal tone. Write “Dear Mr Raj” and end with “Yours sincerely”.
coherence and cohesion
Score: 6. Keep each paragraph short and clear. The last paragraph has too many ideas about moving things and helping the workers.
coherence and cohesion
Use simple, clear links. For example: “Also, paint is coming off the walls.” This is easier than a long sentence.
coherence and cohesion
Check key words: “tap”, “floor”, “sent”, and “prefer”. These small errors can make the letter less clear.
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You tell the owner about both problems: no water in the kitchen and paint coming off the walls.
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You clearly say what you want: a plumber and painters.
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You give a clear time: the weekend.
coherence and cohesion
Your letter has a clear order: problems, what you want, and when you want it done.
coherence and cohesion
You use linking words like “Moreover” and “Plus” to join your ideas.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite
Topic Vocabulary:
  • apartment
  • problems
  • water leak
  • ceiling
  • damp
  • mold
  • health
  • heating system
  • cold
  • chilly
  • comfort
  • electricity
  • lights
  • flicker
  • daily activities
  • kitchen sink
  • clogged
  • dishes
  • prepare
  • food
  • routines
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