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The two maps below show the changes that took place in Shalton village between 1913 and 2010.

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The given layout provides information about the changes that took place in Shalton
village
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 between 1913 and 2010.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the
village
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 underwent significant redevelopment over the period.
While
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 several public buildings and green spaces disappeared, new residential areas and modern facilities were constructed. Noticeably, the road and the post office remained unchanged. Observing 1913 in detail, the
centre
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 of the
village
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 contained a large house surrounded by a number of trees.
to
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 the south of
this
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 area, there was a school,
and
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a
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 bank,
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while
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and
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 a church stood to the north. Outside the triangular
village
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centre
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, another school was located to the west of Shalton road, with farmland situated
further
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 south-west.
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, a few houses were
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built
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 around High Street to the north of the
village
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. Turning to 2010, the large house, church, bank, schools, farmland, and trees
removed
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were removed
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. They opened a room for a café, which was built in the
village
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centre
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,
while
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 the western school was redeveloped into a supermarket and a diary. The farmland was converted into houses. Residential development
also
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 expanded, with new houses constructed along the River Road, within the
village
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centre
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 and beside High Street. Despite these changes, the post office remained
its
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in its
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 original location.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words village, centre with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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