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The best way to plan a holiday is by not planning at all. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

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 people
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 tend to believe
not
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that not
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 having an itinerary for their
trip
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 is more fun and enjoyable
compared to
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than
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 having a
schedule
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 for their
trip
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. In
this
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 essay, I will give my opinions based on my own experience.
To begin
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 with, having an itinerary and
organized
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schedule
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 can make the
trip
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 pleasant.
Therefore
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, you will not feel hurried and exhausted just to see the tourist spots because it’s all planned well.
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, booking hotels before your
trip
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 can make your choices, like which room you want, and get your
desire
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 specific date.
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, going to famous restaurants, they allow reservations before dining. It will
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 well if you plan and have an itinerary beforehand.
Although
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 it may not always seem perfect, sometimes there are
few
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 distractions and inconvieniences but it will easily get fixed if there’s a pattern to follow.
On the other hand
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, having no right
schedule
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trip
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 is not a good idea.
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, it can cause stress for the
travelers
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travellers
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 because they can waste a lot of time and not see the right places they need to go.
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, if they want to go to the temples in Japan, they need to know the opening and closing times. Plus, if they don’t plan, they can’t get hotel rooms because on that
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 it’s already full.
This
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 is a risky side of travelling, but sometimes there are times when no plans can make the best memories, and a lot of people believe
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 the real meaning of
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.
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,
although
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 there are times when having no plans looks very relaxing
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 unexpected happenings are the best ones. I still prefer to have a plan because following a
schedule
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 can make me feel comfortable and know what I will do on that particular day.

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task response
Score: 5. Your main view is clear, but say it more directly in the first part. For example: “I disagree that the best holiday has no plan. A plan is better, but it should leave some free time.”
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Talk more about both sides. You explain why a plan is good well, but the good side of no plan is short. Add one full idea: no plan can let people stay longer in a place they like or find new things by chance.
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Your Japan example is good, but make the link clearer. Say why a missed temple time or full hotel can make the holiday worse.
coherence and cohesion
Score: 5. Some ideas are not in the best order. In the second main part, you first say no plan is bad, then say it can make the best memories. Put the good side first, then show why you still think a plan is better.
coherence and cohesion
Use fewer link words when they do not show the right link. “Therefore” and “Moreover” are not always needed. Use simple links like “For this reason”, “Also”, “However”, and “As a result” only when they fit.
coherence and cohesion
Make each main part start with one clear point. For example: “Planning saves time and lowers stress.” Then give one or two examples and end by linking back to your view.
coherence and cohesion
Your end repeats your view, which is good. Make it stronger by saying the full answer again: a holiday should be planned, but not every hour needs a fixed plan.
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You give a clear view: you do not agree that no plan is the best way to travel.
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You use useful examples, such as hotel rooms, food places, and temples in Japan.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has an introduction, two main parts, and an end.
coherence and cohesion
Words such as “To begin with”, “On the other hand”, and “To conclude” help the reader follow your ideas.
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