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Writing Samples
Band 3

The working week should be shorter and workers should have a longer weekend. Do you agree or disagree?

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I will be writing an essay on the topic of whether workers must have
short
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shorter
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 weeks so
weekend
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the weekend
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 can be extended. My stance is more towards disagreeing with
this
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 statement
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 I will provide the reasons why. First of all, 5 weekdays have always been the right average for people
since
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for
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 a long
time
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ago
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.
Thus
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, it shows that having 5 days is the perfect amount of
time
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 to get your
work
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 done. Because one individual’s
work
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 is related to either the whole company or the public, having
less
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fewer
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 days may
interrupt
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interfere
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 with other people’s life or their
job
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jobs
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 as well.
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, if someone works for a private company as an accountant and if he or she cannot report his or her financial calculations on
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, the whole company’s operations might
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.
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, having more
time
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 to rest might affect one’s
work
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 performance. If we all had 3rd weekend, starting the first day of
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work
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work,
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 we might experience more laziness and unproductiveness.
This
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 is related to how our brain gets used to doing nothing.
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, many studies highlight
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apply
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how having an additional day to rest can lead to ineffectiveness at
workplace
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the workplace
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.
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,
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apply
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 having more days to relax may sound good,
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apply
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in practice it’s the opposite.
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, having
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a short
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 week may not be better than having
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a long
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 week.

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task response
Score: 5. Your answer is on the topic, but your ideas need more support. The claim that five work days have “always” been right is too broad. Explain why a shorter week would cause real problems, and give a clearer example.
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Your second reason is not fully clear. More rest does not always make people lazy. Say why this may happen, or show a case where it happens. Do not say “many studies” unless you explain what they show.
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Use the key words from the question more clearly: a shorter working week and a longer weekend. Your final line should clearly say that you disagree with a shorter working week.
coherence and cohesion
Score: 5. The order of ideas is clear, but some links are not smooth. For example, “Thus” does not clearly show why five days are perfect. Use simple links such as “This means that” or “As a result”.
coherence and cohesion
Keep one main idea in each body part. In the first body part, focus on delays at work. In the second, focus on work habits after a long break. Then add one or two sentences to explain each idea.
coherence and cohesion
Check word forms and clear phrases. Say “a three-day weekend”, not “3rd weekend”; “fewer days”, not “less days”; “a shorter working week”, not “short week”; and “a longer working week”, not “long week”.
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You give a clear view: you disagree. You also give two main reasons and one work example.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear start, two body parts, and an end. Words such as “First of all”, “Secondly”, and “To conclude” help the reader follow your ideas.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • productivity
  • burnout
  • motivation
  • mental well-being
  • work-life balance
  • job satisfaction
  • pollution levels
  • traffic congestion
  • consumer spending
  • economic implications
  • leisure and service sectors
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