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All university undergraduate courses should include a period of time spent studying abroad or doing a work placement. Do you think the advantages of this would outweigh the disadvantages?

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 undergraduate courses should include a period of time spent studying in different countries or doing
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try new things. The disadvantage is
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Score: 5. Your main ideas are clear, but the answer does not fully answer the question. The question asks if the good points are stronger than the bad points. You should clearly say your view in the opening and ending.
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Write a clear view: “I think the good points are stronger than the bad points.” Then make each main part help to show this view.
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Explain your good point more. Say how study in another country can help students learn new ways of work, meet new people, and become more sure of themselves.
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Your work-placement point is useful, but explain that it can give real work skills. Then say why this is more important than the problem of not being ready.
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Make examples more real and clear. For example: “A business student can work in a shop for two months and learn how to speak to customers.”
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Use a stronger plan: 1) say your view, 2) give the main good point, 3) give the bad point but show why it is less serious, 4) repeat your view.
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Start each part with a clear first line. For example: “The main good point is that students get useful real-world skills.”
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Link ideas with easy words: “First”, “Also”, “However”, “Because of this”, and “In the end”.
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Some lines are hard to follow because the ideas are not in a clear order. Keep one main idea in each part, and give one reason and one example for it.
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You give one good point and one bad point. You also use examples for both sides.
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Your answer has an opening and an ending. It stays on the main topic.
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Your essay has clear parts: opening, good side, bad side, and ending.
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You use simple link words such as “For instance”, “For example”, “although”, and “also”.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • study abroad
  • work placement
  • real-world experience
  • practical skills
  • academic knowledge
  • open-minded
  • independent
  • self-confidence
  • adapt to change
  • career chances
  • cultural understanding
  • language skills
  • financial cost
  • family responsibilities
  • compulsory
  • flexible choice
  • personal growth
  • hands-on learning
  • future employer
  • equal opportunity
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