The maps show the changes that happened to an island called Paradise.

✍️ Want to check your own essay?Write on this topic →

The

given two

Correct word order

two given

show examples

maps

illustrates

Correct subject-verb agreement

illustrate

show examples

how paradise

have

Correct subject-verb agreement

has

show examples

been changed from

past

Correct article usage

the past

show examples

to the present.

Overall

Linking Words

, the

island

Use synonyms

has

gone under

Wrong verb form

undergone

show examples

a significant redevelopment, with many original

feature

Fix the agreement mistake

features

show examples

being removed or replaced.

commericial

Correct your spelling

Commercial

facilities have been added, including

Correct article usage

show examples

open

restaurent

Correct your spelling

restaurant

, a hotel complex, a cafe and a cycle path,

while

Linking Words

some areas like

beach

Correct article usage

the beach

show examples

and natural spring remain unchanged. On the western side, scientific resarch station have been replaced with a hotel complex and a swimming pool beside that complex. In the north-west side of the

island

Use synonyms

Beach

Correct article usage

the beach

show examples

has remained unchanged, but allowing tourist to swim in

swimming

Correct determiner usage

show examples

permitted

area

Correct word choice

swimming area

show examples

In addition

Linking Words

, Peer has extended a lot since

now

Use the right word

then

show examples

, and a boat has been replaced with a

curise

Correct your spelling

cruise

ship. On the other side, an open restaurant

have

Correct subject-verb agreement

has

show examples

been

counstructed

Correct your spelling

constructed

at the centre of the

island

Use synonyms

Capitalize the word

show examples

cafe area has

built

Verb problem

been built

show examples

near

natural

Correct article usage

a natural

show examples

spring to entertain tourist and

Fix capitalization

show examples

the outskirts of the

Use synonyms

island

Punctuation problem

island,

show examples

a scenic lookout point has

also

Linking Words

been created to take picture, a bicycle path

have

Correct subject-verb agreement

has

show examples

also

Linking Words

been constructed across the

island

Use synonyms

satvik.anaghan1

Aug 9, 2026

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".

▼

Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.

▼

Vocabulary: Replace the words island with synonyms.

▼

Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 2 times.

▼

Vocabulary: The word "unchanged" was used 2 times.

▼

Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.

▼

Do you want to check your IELTS essays?

Submit unlimited essays, letters and charts. Sign up right now and start improving your writing skills.

4
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
23
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

0123456789.0505

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

175 words

🚀 Prepare for IELTS writing section today!

Unlimited Task 1 & Task 2 checks
Practice with essays, charts, and letters.
Personalized suggestions & mistake analysis
Spot every mistake and boost your score.
Topic ideas & vocabulary helpers
Expand your ideas and use the right words.
Progress tracking
Watch your writing improve with every practice.

What to do next:

Look at other essays:

7.5
band
Some people believe that the difference between the lowest paid job and the highest should be reduced. To what extent do you agree or disagree
Nowadays, many people think that we should decrease the huge gap between the salaries that have been offered by the various companies in different sectors. I disagree with this opinion, as if we reduced the difference people would not feel that they have been recognised for their hard work, and many students would choose the easiest pathway to work rather than studying hard to work.
8
band
With advancing technology, the development of automated vehicles is becoming reality. In your opinion, what are the advantages and disadvantages of self-driving vehicles?
It is quite common these days for transportation in many countries to be automated through development in technology. This essay will discuss the benefits and drawbacks of this trend from my own opinions.
8
band
Write a letter to the restaurant, applying for the job. In your letter: •explain what you are currently doing •describe your suitability for this area of work •say when you can attend an interview
I am writing this letter to express my deep interest in the Chef position in your restaurant. I worked in many restaurants in the past so I believe I am the right candidate for this position.
6
band
Some people think that the government should provide free and universal health care for all citizens. Others think that health care is a personal responsibility and people should pay for their own medical expenses. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Some people believe that health care facilities should be free for the public, while others claim that, one should pay his own bills as it is their own responsibility. In my opinion, higher authorities should provide free healthcare to all the citizens, because this will eliminate the discrimination between the elite and the lower classes. The explanation, the later people give is, that the governments should spend more on the economic sector rather than on healthcare, as economic growth is extremely essential for the country.
7.5
band
In the past most working people had only one job however nowadays more and more people have more than one job at the same time. what are the reasons for this development? what are the advantages and disadvantages of having more than one job?
Nowadays, an expanding number of people are opting for holding multiple jobs at the same time. There could be several reasons why this is the case and it has its own drawbacks and benefits.

The maps show the changes that happened to an island called Paradise.

Some people believe that the difference between the lowest paid job and the highest should be reduced. To what extent do you agree or disagree

With advancing technology, the development of automated vehicles is becoming reality. In your opinion, what are the advantages and disadvantages of self-driving vehicles?

Write a letter to the restaurant, applying for the job. In your letter: •explain what you are currently doing •describe your suitability for this area of work •say when you can attend an interview

Some people think that the government should provide free and universal health care for all citizens. Others think that health care is a personal responsibility and people should pay for their own medical expenses. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

In the past most working people had only one job however nowadays more and more people have more than one job at the same time. what are the reasons for this development? what are the advantages and disadvantages of having more than one job?