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Some people believe that governments should invest in providing education for adults who missed the opportunity to study when they were young. Others believe that government funding should be used to improve education for the younger generation. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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People
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 have different opinions about whether the government’s
invest
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investment
 in
education
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 should be given to illiterate adults or the young
generation
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. In my opinion, both views have
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, but
education
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 improvement for the younger
generation
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 should be
prioritized
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 in current times. On the one hand, the argument for providing
education
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 for uneducated adults is based on promoting equity in a society where not all individuals have opportunities to access
education
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.
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 is a valid point because the chance for illiterate adults to gain knowledge
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and
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 skills that can enable them to improve their financial situations.
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, in many developing countries, the governments create
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 conditions for
adult
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adults
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 to approach knowledge that helps them to become entrepreneurs and have their own businesses, which can contribute to countries economic.
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, the improvement in
education
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 is
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 crucial government investment when the younger
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 can make breakthroughs for the
countries
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 in the future with their potential abilities.
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 is because young
people
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 who are flexible in their mindset and easily receptive to new concepts can make progress in many aspects,
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 as economics, financial markets or technologies.
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, many innovations and research that are made by young
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 have valuable flavors in life and develop human life. In conclusion,
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 investing in providing
education
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 to older
people
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 can make a chance to change their life, I believe enhancing
education
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 facilities for
younger
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the younger
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generation
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 is
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 better investment because it can make obvious progress by their flexible and efficient approaching knowledge abilities.

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