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The maps below show the main road in Farmshire village and development plans for 2024.

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The maps illustrate the layout of Farmshire
village
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 at present and its proposed future redevelopment by 2024.
Overall
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, the new plan makes plenty of changes to the
infrastructures
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infrastructure
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 of the
village
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,
invloving
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involving
 building a supermarket and an employment assistance on the south.
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, there' s no plan to change the main road and the majority of farms. On the northwest site, the woodland at present will be replaced by a community soccer field, which is to the right of
farms
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the farms
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. What's more, the southern farm is going to be converted to a poultry farm, with some trees planted
to
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in
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 its southern part.
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, the southeast part of the
village
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 will concentrate on providing urban facilities. A new supermarket will be built
on
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in
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 the centre
to
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of
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 the main road.
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, the range of woods on the southern side will be reduced a little to make way for the planned employment assistance, where it is a
village
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 store now.
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, the cooperative bank and the prayer centre on the east will remain
at
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in
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 the same place.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words village with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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