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The graph below shows information about the recruitment of teachers in Ontario between 2001 and 2007.

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The given graph illustrates the changing number of first-year teaching subject
teachers
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 in Ontario from 2001 to 2007. From an
overall
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 perspective, it is readily apparent that all the subjects fluctuated over time. French language
teachers
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 experienced the most growth,
while
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 English language
teachers
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 showed a significant decrease. Looking into the data in more detail, the retention rate for French
teachers
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 was the highest during the period. It began at 70% in 2001 and dropped by half in 2002.
However
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, a decade later, it started to climb moderately.
Then
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 it remained stable until 2005 before beginning to decline marginally.
Finally
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, the percentage rose minimally to reach its peak.
In contrast
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, English
teachers
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 were the only ones whose figures ever saw a decrease in duration. It was approximately 80% in 2001, but after two
years
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years,
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 it dramatically dropped to 40%.
Subsequently
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, the line went up to nearly 50% but
then
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 substantially plunged to 25%
at the end
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.

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