The chart below gives information about the most common sports played in New' Zealand in 2002.

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The bar chart illustrates data about the most popular

sports

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among females and males in New Zealand in 2001.The data is measured by

precentage

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percentage

Overall

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girls

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recorded the highest rate in playing netball,

whereas

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boys

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had the lowest rate.

In contrast

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boys

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rated the peak in soccer,

while

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girls

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had the lowest recorded in cricket.

Sports

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such

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as athletics,

marital

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martial

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arts, basketball, tennis, swimming and

other

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others

went through

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ups

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and down figures. At first glance, females reached the peak in netball

sports

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at approximately 25%, which showed a sharp difference

comparing

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compared

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to the

boys

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(rated less than 3%).

Although

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apply

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boys

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overtook

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outnumbered

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in most of the

sports

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espacially

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especially

soccer(recorded about 25%)

and

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, and

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females were around 5%.

Basket ball

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Basketball

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and tennis had the same trends.

According to

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the graph, cricket was the least wanted sport among

girls

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at less than 5%.

Moreover

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, athletics

excperinced

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experienced

similar

trnds

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trends

between men and women.

Furthermore

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marital

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martial

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arts, basketball, tennis and other

sports

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were mostly loved by

boys

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while

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girls

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prefered

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preferred

swimming.

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Aug 17, 2026

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".

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Vocabulary: Replace the words sports, girls, boys with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.

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Linking words
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3
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Grammar mistakes
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

161 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

Popularity
Demographic trends
Participation rates
National sport
Cultural impact
International identity
Generational shifts
Grassroots initiatives
Sports infrastructure
Historical roots
Evolution over time
Government support
Community engagement
Sports preferences
Future trends

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The chart below gives information about the most common sports played in New' Zealand in 2002.

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