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Band 4.5

It is thought by some that it is better to live in a city while others believe that life is better in the country side. Discuss both sides and give your opinion

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Introduction
Most of the individuals believe that urban life is good to live and others
aruge
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argue
 that rural
area
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 is better place to live. I personally think
country side
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countryside
 living has some disadavantages than
cities
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,
eventhrough
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even though
 villages is good place to live.
Body paragraph 1
To begin
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 with, rural
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area's
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areas
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 are more
peacefull
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peaceful
 to live
and
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in and
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 less
stress
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stressful
. In
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the countryside
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countryside
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countryside,
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 less population makes
every thing
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everything
 simple
and
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, and
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house
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houses
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 are big with
lot
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a lot
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 of
area
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 for kids to play in
backyard
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the backyard
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 too.
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,
peacefull
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peaceful
 means no construction sound and less traffic because
of
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the
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 highway
are
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is
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 empty.
Their
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There
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 are some
disadavantage
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disadvantages
 living in
rural
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a rural
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area
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, it's very hard to find
software
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a software
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 job and
lack
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a lack
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 of development,
serivces
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services
 might take more time.
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Furthermore
, for most of the electronic
rapairs
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repairs
 takes more days to
done
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be done
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, because parts
has
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have
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 to come
the
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from the
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 urban
area
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 and usually
traportation
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transportation
 may delays on repairs.
Body paragraph 2
On the other hand
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, living in
cities
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 make peoples day to day life easy and most of the need's available in less than 10miles around. One of the best thing food delivery and driver less
car
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instead
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 of
taxies
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taxis
.
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 doordash, people without
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car
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cars
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 or busy with work can order food resturent to door delivery, and in some of the
mertopolitian
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metropolitan
cities
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uber are
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Uber is
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 providing driver less
car
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 as
taxies
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taxis
.
people
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People
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 can schedule their ride in
adavnace
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advance
 and
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car
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the car
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 will
on
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be on
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 time. But more stressful to live in
cities
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 because of
bad
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the bad
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tarffic
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traffic
 situation
and
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, and
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 most of the things are expensive.
Conclusion
In
conculsion
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conclusion
, as
i
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I
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 said before,
best
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the best
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 place to live is
rural
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a rural
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area
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 with some disadavantages and
cities
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has
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have
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 more positives but more
mentals stressfull
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mentally stressful
. If
i
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I
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 need to choose one,
i
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I
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 will select
countryside
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the countryside
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 every time.

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task response
Make your main view clearer in the first paragraph. You say country life has more bad points than city life, but then you say it is the best choice. State one clear view from the start.
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Develop each main point more fully. For example, explain why peace and space are more important to you than easy jobs and services in a city.
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Some examples are not the best fit for all cities, such as driverless cars. Use wider examples like schools, hospitals, work, shops, parks, and public transport.
coherence and cohesion
Keep one main idea in each paragraph. In the country paragraph, first explain good points, then clearly move to bad points with a linking phrase such as “However”.
coherence and cohesion
Use clearer links between ideas. For example: “This is because…”, “As a result…”, and “In contrast…”.
coherence and cohesion
Avoid repeating the same idea in the end. Give a short final view and one main reason, such as: “I would choose the countryside because a calm life is more important to me than city comfort.”
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You discuss both city and country life, and you clearly say that you would choose the countryside.
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You give real examples, such as jobs, repairs, traffic, food delivery, and transport.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear beginning, two main parts, and an ending. This makes it easy to follow.
coherence and cohesion
You use helpful linking words, such as “To begin with”, “On the other hand”, and “In conclusion”.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urbanization
  • infrastructure
  • metropolitan
  • rural
  • tranquility
  • pollution
  • congestion
  • fast-paced
  • idyllic
  • community cohesion
  • cultural diversity
  • amenities
  • lifestyle
  • employment opportunities
  • environmental quality
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