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Band 4

More and more plastic is polluting cities, the countryside and oceans in the world. What are the problems caused by plastic wastes? What measures should be taken to solve it?

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Introduction
In recent years, rapid growth in
modrenlisation
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modernisation
 of the world
leads
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has led
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 to more wasteful materials, and different types of pollution,
plastic
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 is one
from
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of
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 those. I will discuss the problems created by
plastic
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wastes
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waste
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, with solutions in
upcoming
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the upcoming
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 paragraphs.
Body paragraph 1
Undoubtedly, success
is
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comes with a price.
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,
growth
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the growth
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 of economies
are
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is
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 not possible without having extraordinary infrastructure,
large scale
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large-scale
 manufacturing, automobile plants, and import and export as well.
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,
eastabliahment
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establishment
 of those obviously results in producing
waste
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 material like
plastic
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. It spreads all over the cities, remote
area
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areas
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, and marine life as well.
Due to
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plastic
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 enrichment in water,
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consequently
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apply
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marine life
affects
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is affected
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, and all the mammals
pushed
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are pushed
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 to migrate from one location to
other
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another
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. Cities are not exceptional, large
waste
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dumped
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is dumped
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to country sides
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in the countryside
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,
and led
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leading
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 to incurable diseases.
Body paragraph 2
To tackle
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this
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 problem,
government
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the government
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,
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apply
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 and
public
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the public
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 should work together to prevent
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 from spreading everywhere. People can make sure to produce less water by using only necessary
plastic
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 products, keep
eye
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an eye
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 on daily usage, and control it without impacting their livelihood.
Government
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The government
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 can launch awareness campaigns for
public
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the public
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, and should ban
plastic
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 products if necessary.
Factories
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Factory
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waste
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 shouldn't be dumped to river, canals or any water sources to prevent marine life
affecting
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from it. Eventually, people will realise
this
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, plastics made products are harmful
for
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to
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 their lives
as well as
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for
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to
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 other creatures.
Conclusion
In conclusion, recent developments
producing
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have produced
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 unbelievable
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waste
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amounts of
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plastic
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materials
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waste,
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 which is
un disposable, and it
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non-biodegradable, and it is
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 dumped
to
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in
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 cities out skirts that led to numerous health problems. It should responsibility of both people and
Government
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the government
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 to reduce it, and make arrangements to eliminate it before
spreading
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it spreads
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.

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task response
Answer both parts more fully. Give two clear problems, such as harm to sea animals and harm to people’s health, then explain how each one happens.
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Use clear and true examples. For example, plastic bags can block drains and cause floods; sea animals may eat plastic and die.
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Keep each idea on the main topic. The part about economic growth, cars, and trade is too wide and does not clearly show why plastic waste is a problem.
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Make the solutions more exact. Say how people can use cloth bags, reuse bottles, sort waste, and how the state can improve waste pick-up and fine firms that put waste in water.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear start, body parts, and end. However, make the first sentence simpler and state the two main points you will discuss.
coherence and cohesion
Use one main idea in each paragraph. Start with a clear topic sentence, explain it, and then add an example.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words with care. Words such as “therefore” and “consequently” should show a clear cause and result. Some links now make the meaning hard to follow.
coherence and cohesion
Avoid very long sentences with many commas. Split them into two or three short sentences so the reader can follow your meaning.
coherence and cohesion
Use the same words for the same idea. For example, choose “plastic waste” or “plastic products” and use them in a clear way throughout.
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You address both the problems of plastic waste and ways to reduce it.
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You include the roles of both people and the government.
coherence and cohesion
The essay uses separate paragraphs for problems, solutions, and the ending.
coherence and cohesion
The conclusion returns to the main idea that plastic waste needs action from people and the government.
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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • degradation
  • ecosystem
  • entangled
  • microplastics
  • aesthetic impact
  • pollution
  • disposal
  • recycling
  • habitats
  • wildlife harm
  • accumulate
  • landscape
  • tourism
  • environmental policy
  • sustainable alternatives
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