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the map below show an industrial area in the town of Norbition and planned future development of the site

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The plane illustrates how
will be transformed
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apply
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one industrial zone
the
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in the
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 town of Norbition,
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Overall
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Overall,
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 it is evident that
this
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area
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 is planning to change from
manufactiring
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manufacturing
 purposes to
housting
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housing
, there will build houses and new facilities and services to community. To start with
south
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, south
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 of the river zone, the factories around the principal
area
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 will be replaced
for
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with
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 houses, to the rigth it will build a
shool
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school
 and playground
,
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. Also,
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also
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 to the left, next to
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the
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roundabout
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roundabout,
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will be add a medical center amd shoops
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a medical centre and shops will be added
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. On the
botton
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bottom
, in sourth
zone
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zone,
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 there is
planning
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a plan
 to
constructed
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construct
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 a new roundabout,
it
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which
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 will be smaller than the
currently
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current
 one.
Additionally
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 on the other
area
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, to the north of the river, there is a
farmer
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farming
area
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, where a road will be
widexpread
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widened
 with
housing
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a housing
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area
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.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • industrial area
  • planned development
  • existing facilities
  • proposed changes
  • infrastructure
  • public spaces
  • sustainable development
  • green spaces
  • pollution control
  • local community
  • job creation
  • amenities
  • property values
  • displacement
  • traffic congestion
  • environmental degradation
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