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Band 1

people should sometimes do things that they do not enjoy doing. Use specific reasons and details to support your answer

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Introduction
Not all the time
people
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do people
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 do things that they enjoy or
they
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apply
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like.
In
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This
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this
Linking Words
 essay will
states
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state
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 some reasons in
details
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detail
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 supporting my answer.
Body paragraph 1
Multiple factors can paly major role in forcing
the
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apply
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people to do
thniks
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things
 that they do not enjoy
it
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apply
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. First
exmpale
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example
 will be the work, there is no
gurantee
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guarantee
 that the
studnet
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student
 will get a job
similer
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similar
 to the discipline that he or she studied.
Linking Words
Hence
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Hence,
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 you will find that people do the work but
not
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do not
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 really
enjoying
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enjoy
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 it
due to
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 the difference from their studies. They work to get the wage
at the end
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.
Conclusion
Also
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,

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task response
Give a clear answer in the first paragraph. Say if you agree that people should sometimes do things they do not enjoy, and explain why.
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Your work example is on the topic, but it needs more detail. Explain how doing a job a person does not like can help them pay for food, a home, or their family.
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Add one more main reason, such as doing hard house work, helping a friend, or learning a new skill. Then write a short ending that brings your ideas together.
coherence and cohesion
The essay stops after “Also,”, so the ideas are not complete. Finish the second point and add an ending.
coherence and cohesion
Use a simple plan: first paragraph with your answer, one paragraph for each reason, then a final paragraph.
coherence and cohesion
Use clear linking words, such as “First,” “For example,” “Also,” and “In the end.” Make sure each paragraph has one main idea.
coherence and cohesion
Check word order and spelling so your meaning is clear. For example, write “Many factors can force people to do things they do not enjoy.”
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You chose a relevant example about work and money.
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You tried to explain the reason people may stay in a job they do not enjoy.
coherence and cohesion
You started with an introduction and used “First” to begin your first main point.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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