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The line chart below illustrates the number of worldwide tourist arrivals in 5 countries from 1995 until 2010.

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The line graph reveals the number of tourists in five different countries, expressed in millions, from 1995 to 2010.
Overall
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, the data indicates that the USA have attracted the highest number of visitors over the
period
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 given.
Moreover
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, France became the second country visited ;
however
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, by the end, it nearly matched the same number of tourists as the USA . At the start of the
period
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, Brazil visited more than Egypt a little bit , but it decreased during the
period
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 given and became the lowest
tourist
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visited country
 among other countries,
while
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 Egypt became the second lowest
country visited
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visited country
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.
Furthermore
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, Malaysia started with 20
million
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 tourists and increased slightly throughout the
period
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 until reaching 45
million
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 approximately by the end.
Additionally
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, France was the country that rose quickly compared to the other countries, starting in 1995 with 30
million
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 and
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at
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 the end reached 85
million
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words period, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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