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The given pie charts compare the expenses in 7 different categories in 1966 and 1996 by American Citizens. Write a report for a university lecture describing the information below.

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The
given two pie chart illustrates
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two pie charts given illustrate
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 the cash flow of an average
american
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American
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,
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;
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 there are seven different categories over a period of 30 years.
Overall
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, food was the highest
expense
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 and computer was the lowest
expense
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on the year of
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in
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 1966. In 1966,
Cars was
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cars were
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 the highest
expense
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and
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, and
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books
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was
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were
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 the lowest
expense
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 of an average
american
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American
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 citizen. In 1966, cars was at the second place, about 23% of the total
expense
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 and slightly less than
the
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apply
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double
of
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apply
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that
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is
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of
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 food, which conquare the first place.
Similiarly
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Similarly
,Furniture and petrol
being
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are
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 slightly
same
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the same
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, which is 10% and 9% of the average american spend.
Athought
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A thought
,
Books
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 being at the second
last
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 place
having
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, having
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 almost 6%.
Books
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 being the least spend catagories. In 1996, car being the highest spend with the
proporation
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proportion
 of 45%. Food and
restaurent
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restaurant
 being the same at 14% .
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, Furniture and petrol
being
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are
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 at
same
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the same
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, which
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level, which
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 is 8%.
Books
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 is least
spend
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spent
 area amongst all
and
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, and
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 computer being at the average spend.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words expense, books with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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