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A friend has moved to your city. Write a letter inviting them to visit

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Dear Ahmed, I am writing to invite you to
visit
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 me in my city so that we can enjoy a meal, have an amusing time together, and
visit
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 some interesting places\. There are different facilities in my city,
such
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 as museums, restaurants, and a court\.
Also
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, do not forget to bring a toy for my son\.
First,
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we are going to spend our day visiting different places, especially the museum\. There are plenty of
arts
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 and paintings that we can look at and enjoy\. It will be a good place to relax and have a great time together\.
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, we need to follow some rules inside the building,
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 as being quiet and keeping the place clean\.
Secondly
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, we can
visit
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 a famous restaurant in our city\. It has special soup and grilled chicken with many
appetizers
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 at a low cost\. There is
also
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 a special offer
at the end
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 of
this
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 month\. We should arrive on time because the restaurant is usually very crowded at two
o’clock\
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.
Thirdly
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, we can
visit
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 the court, which will be our final destination\. There are many old buildings and interesting places to discover\. We should explore the area carefully and take some useful things with us\.
Finally
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, we can spend the
last
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 hours of the day at my home, where we can have some discussions and talk about our next
visit
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\. Best wishes, Saif

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task response
Make the invite more clear. Say when your friend should come, how long they can stay, and how they can get to your home.
task response
Some details do not help the main aim. For example, the court and its old buildings need more clear reason, or you can choose a more fun place.
coherence and cohesion
Your letter has a clear start, middle, and end. To make it flow better, use simple links such as “then”, “after that”, and “in the end”.
coherence and cohesion
Keep each part focused on one plan. The part about the museum is clear, but the rules in the museum are not very important for an invite.
coherence and cohesion
The ending is polite, but add a clear last line, such as “I hope you can come soon.”
task response
You give your friend a warm invite and share a full day plan with food, places, and time at home.
coherence and cohesion
You use clear order words such as “First”, “Secondly”, “Thirdly”, and “Finally”, so the reader can follow your plan easily.
coherence and cohesion
The greeting and closing are right for a friendly letter.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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