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Describe the study habit and what's affect on them?with opinion and example.

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Introduction
Among students everywhere , there is
alot
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a lot
 of
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debate
 about study habits. Some claim
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 is better to study during the day,
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 others prefer the
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. Both
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 have strong arguments.
Body paragraph 1
on
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 the one hand, one benefit of studying at
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 is the fact that there are
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 interruptions.
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 environment is quieter in comparison to daytime, and you are less likely to be disturbed by phone calls or messages on
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email
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 instance.
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, energy levels should be taken into consideration. When you wake up in the morning after a good
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, you feel relaxed reluned and full of energy.
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 a result, you can concentrate more easily and be more productive.
Body paragraph 3
Another important factor is lighting. Natural light is by far the best solution as
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 as your health is concerned. Artificial light can harm your
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Eyesight
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can
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 cause restlessness
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and
 insomnia.
Conclusion
In conclusion, I think it depends on what works best for each individual. During the day, you
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 fully rested and your mind is clear. At
night
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, the peace and quiet
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make
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 it easier to concentrate
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. Ultimately
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, it is a question of one's body clock and personal preference.

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task response
State your own view more clearly at the start. You say both times can work, but explain which one you would choose and why.
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Add one real example. For example, say how a student who has a busy home may study well at night, while a student with school in the morning may study well in the day.
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Explain the effect of each habit in more detail. Day study may help sleep and health; night study may give peace but can make a student tired the next day.
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Keep all points linked to study habits. The light point is useful, but show more clearly how it affects study and school work.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear start, two main sides, and an ending. Make the order even smoother by giving one main idea in each body part and then adding an example.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words with care. You use 'On the one hand' and 'On the other hand' well. Add simple links such as 'For this reason', 'However', and 'For example' to show how ideas connect.
coherence and cohesion
The third body part about light feels a little separate. Link it to the day-study point, or put it in the same part as energy and health.
coherence and cohesion
Check small word errors because they can slow the reader: 'a lot', 'debate', 'it is', 'fewer', 'sleep', 'refreshed', 'as far', 'eyesight', and 'and'.
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You cover both day study and night study, and you give clear reasons for each choice.
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Your ending gives a fair personal view: the best time can depend on the person and their body clock.
coherence and cohesion
The essay is easy to follow because it has an introduction, body parts for both sides, and a conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
The use of 'On the one hand' and 'On the other hand' clearly shows the two sides of the topic.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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