IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 6.5

A friend has moved to your city. Write a letter inviting them to visit.

✍️ Want to check your own essay?Write on this topic →
Dear Ahmed, I am writing to ask if you could visit me so we can have a meal, have a fun time together, and explore my city and its facilities,
such
Linking Words
 as museums, restaurants, and courts. Don't forget to bring a gift for my son and a toy for my boy.
First,
Linking Words
we are going to spend our day in different places—
for example
Linking Words
, the museum. There are plenty of artworks and paintings to see, and they can thrill us and help us relax. The museum has some rules inside the building,
such
Linking Words
 as being quiet and keeping it clean.
Secondly
Linking Words
, the famous restaurant in our city has a special soup and grilled chicken with many appetisers, served at a low cost, as a special offer
at the end
Linking Words
 of
this
Linking Words
 month. We should be there on time because the restaurant will be too crowded at two o’clock.
Thirdly
Linking Words
, the court will be the final destination, with many old myths and plans to discover carefully because of the smooth paper. It needs some compass and mass to move through
this
Linking Words
 court.
Finally
Linking Words
, the
last
Linking Words
 hours of the day will be
at
Verb problem
spent at
show examples
 my home, discussing how the next invite will be. Best wishes. Saif

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

task response
Say when you want your friend to come and give clear plans for the visit. Do not ask for gifts, as this can sound rude.
task response
Use clear facts about the city. The part about the court, paper, compass, and mass is hard to understand.
coherence and cohesion
Your letter has a clear start, middle, and end. Link the plans in a simple order: first, then, after that, and finally.
coherence and cohesion
Keep each part on one clear point. Make the last part a warm close, such as asking your friend to write back.
task response
You invite your friend and give many ideas for things to do together.
coherence and cohesion
You use Dear Ahmed, short parts, and Best wishes, so the letter is easy to follow.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »- a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: