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Multinational companies improves the quality of life in the foreign countries where they sell their goods. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Introduction
Some people say that International
companies
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 promote
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lifestyle
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a lifestyle
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 in foreign
countries
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 where they sell their products. I completely agree
to
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with
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this
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 predicament because of two main reasons
which
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, which
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is
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are
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 better profits, affordability,
wealthy
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a wealthy
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 economy and
rich
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a rich
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 demographic in developed
countries
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.
Body paragraph 1
Firstly
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, most corporate
companies
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 target
international
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the international
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 market to promote
lavish
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a lavish
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lifestyle
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 to wealthy consumers.
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 is the most common approach taken by
companies
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 to make huge profits by targeting
rich
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a rich
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 demographic in developed
countries
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.
people
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People
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 in these
countries
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 are more concerned about their
lifestyle
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 and spend a lot of money to improve it
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, because
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 of which, these
companies
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 exploit them by targeting their insecurities.
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, most of these
high end
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high-end
 luxury cars,
apparels
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apparel
, and beauty products are sold in wealthy and developed
european
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European
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 and
american
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American
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countries
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Body paragraph 2
Moreover
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, these International
countries
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 have better economy which
makes
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enable
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 them
able
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apply
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to afford products from multinational
companies
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 to improve their quality of life. These corporate
companies
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 do not have to spend a lot to gain customers and convince them to buy their product to upgrade their
lifestyle
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,
also
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, these goods would be much cheaper for foreign nationals
then
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 to local people comparatively.
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, the foreign exchange rate of one euro is higher than one rupee
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, which
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 makes the goods more
afordable
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affordable
 in
europe
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Europe
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 than in India significantly.
Conclusion
In conclusion, Multinational
companies
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 promote quality of life internationally by selling their goods
due to
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few
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a few
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 reasons
,
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that is
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 affordability, huge profit gap, interest in improving their
lifestyle
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, and better economy. Based on these benefits, I completely agree with the topic statement.

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