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The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line chart illustrates the
amount
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number
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 of
shops
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 which closed and the number of new
shops
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 that opened in a country from 2011
and
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to
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 2018.
Overall
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, in the began in the
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period
Punctuation problem
period,
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 new
shops
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was
Correct subject-verb agreement
were
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 the highest number,
while
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closures
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was
Correct subject-verb agreement
were
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 the lowest.
However
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,
in
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at
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 the end of the
period
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 closure
overtook the openings
Correct word order
of shops overtook the opening figures
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shops
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 and was the highest
figures
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apply
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. In 2011,openings
was
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were
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 under 9.000 and
felling
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fell
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 slightly to
reached
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reach
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 around 4.000 in 2012.
Followed
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Following
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this
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, there was an
increased
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increase
 in openings and
at
Correct pronoun usage
it
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 peaked over 6.000 in 2014
Punctuation problem
, and
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and that
Correct word choice
which
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 was the highest
increased
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increase
 in the whole
period
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. After
that
Add a comma
that,
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 it decrease shareply at 4.000 and remained the same
unmbers
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numbers
 from 2015 to
2017
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2017,
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then
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felling
Wrong verb form
fell
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 dramatically at 3.00 in 2018. In
2011
Punctuation problem
2011,
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closures
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was
Verb problem
apply
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started around
by 6.300
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6,300
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 and
fall
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fell
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 to 6.000 in 2012. Before
started
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starting
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 rose significantlly a peaked at 7.200 and that the highest
figures
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figure
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. Followed by
declined considerably
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a decline
 to
reached
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reach
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 under 1.000 in 2015
and
Punctuation problem
, and
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 that lowest
unmbers
Correct your spelling
number
 in
whole
Correct article usage
the whole
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period
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. After that
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closures
Punctuation problem
, closures
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 grew steadily at up 5.000 in 2016,
agter
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after
this
Linking Words
 there was a fluctuation in
closures
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 between up 5.000 to under 5.500 in the rest of
ther
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the
period
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.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words shops, period, closures with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • retail landscape
  • net growth
  • market dynamics
  • economic indicators
  • fluctuations
  • pivotal
  • consumption patterns
  • e-commerce
  • brick-and-mortar
  • downward/upward trend
  • stabilize
  • recession
  • boom
  • retail sector
  • closure rate
  • inauguration/opening rate
  • consumer market
  • saturate
  • commercial viability
  • profitability
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