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The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two different countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The given line graph illustrates the usage of
water
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 in various sectors
and
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,
the
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and the
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 table compares
water
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 consumption between two
nation
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nations
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 (Brazil and
,
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congo
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Congo
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) from 1900 to 2000.
Overall
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, it is clear from the graph that agriculture
was
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accounted for
large
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a large
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 consumption of
water
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 and
,
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 Brazil dominated Congo in cunsuming by large
number
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amount
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. Industrial and
,
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 domestic utilized similiar amount of
water
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. Focusing first on agriculture, from around 500km in
year
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the year
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 1900 and, over 100 years later same
agriculytre ulitizing
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agriculture utilising
 more than 3000km. Almost 50
year
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years
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, both domestic and industrial used
similiar
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a similar
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 amount of
water
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 and
,
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in the
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 next 5 decades
industries
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, industries
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 used around 1300km
and
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,
domestic
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and domestic
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 usage
was
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increased to only 500km. Shifting focus to Brazil, one
the
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of the
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 lagrest population in the world used more
water
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359
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, 359
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 for 26500
kilometer
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kilometres
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 of loand and
population
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the population
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 was 176 million. Congo had only 5.2millions of residents, so
water
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 consumption
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also
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was also
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 low at only 8metric club and agriculture was only 100kilometer.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, km with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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