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You recently Stayed at your friends Place to look after the house while he/she is away. You accidentally damaged something in his/her house. write a letter to feed friend In your letter you should : •Describe what the accident was •explain when it happened •Suggest how the damage can be fixed

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Dear Jaspreet , I hope you’re doing well. Thank you again for trusting me to look after your house
while
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 you were away on the business trip. I’m writing to let you know about a small accident that happened
while
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 I was staying there. Yesterday evening,
while
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 I was cleaning the living room, I accidentally knocked over the floor
lamp
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 next to the sofa. It fell onto the floor , and the glass lampshade broke. Fortunately, the
lamp
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 itself is still working, but the lampshade has been totally damaged. I’m really sorry about what happened. I would be happy to replace the lampshade with a new one. I checked online and found a similar replacement that should fit the
lamp
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 perfectly.
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 , if you prefer, I can take the
lamp
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 to a repair shop and have the damaged part replaced professionally. Please let me know which option you would prefer. Once again, I sincerely apologise for the accident and hope
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 hasn’t caused you too much inconvenience. I am looking forward to getting your response. Yours lovingly, Vishally

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task response
You cover all parts of the task: what broke, when it happened, and how you can fix it. You could add one small detail, such as why you were cleaning at that time, to make the event feel more real.
task response
Your repair ideas are clear. Choose one main plan first, then give the other plan only if your friend does not like the first one.
coherence and cohesion
Your letter has a clear order: reason for writing, the accident, the fix, and a closing. Keep this good paragraph order.
coherence and cohesion
Use commas without a space before them: write "floor, and" not "floor , and". Also write "Otherwise, if you prefer" not "Otherwise , if you prefer".
coherence and cohesion
The ending can sound more natural as "I look forward to hearing from you."
task response
You clearly say that the glass lampshade broke, that it happened yesterday evening, and that you will pay to replace or repair it.
coherence and cohesion
Each paragraph has one clear job, and linking words such as "Fortunately" and "Otherwise" help the reader follow your ideas.
coherence and cohesion
The friendly opening and polite apology suit a letter to a friend.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accident
  • broke
  • favorite
  • cleaning
  • shelf
  • suggest
  • fix
  • new
  • similar
  • choose
  • pay
  • damage
  • miss
  • greeting
  • friend
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