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In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driveless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

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Introduction
Overrall
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, motor vehicule is one of the commun transportation nowadays.
For instance
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, a lot of cars have the self-driving option.
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, as we can see in many cities. Driverless
taxy
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taxis
 are on the
circulation
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. I believe that
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 the advantages
are
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outweigh the disadvantages.
Body paragraph 1
Although
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,
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 the transportation without drivers
are
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 crucial because you can be on your phone or sleeping,
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 the
vehicule
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vehicle
 is in motion.
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 fatigue,
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sometimes
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 driving gets you tired
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therefore
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 employees that are working third shift don't have to worry because
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a lot
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 of accidents happen when people
sleepy
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are sleepy
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while
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 driving.
Body paragraph 2
Futhermore
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Furthermore
,
It
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 could be dangerous for passengers. Even
how good
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if
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 you are as driver, does not skip you from acccident. Likely, operators that driving under
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the influence
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 may induce a car crash. So
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humans
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 may act fast to prevent injury or
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a worse
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of the
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situation than a
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robot
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Conclusion
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, driverless
vehicule
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vehicles
 have more
outcome
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outcomes
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 than useless
, because
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ones, because
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 of fatigue.
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,
human
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humans
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 may use proper reaction
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 inexpected situation.

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Give one clear main idea for each side. Explain why driverless cars can help tired people, then explain why they can be unsafe in a new or hard road event.
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Answer the full question more clearly. Say if the good points are greater than the bad points, and make sure the body of the essay shows this.
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Use real and clear examples. For example, a night worker may sleep in a car on the way home. A driverless car may not act well when a child runs into the road.
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Some ideas need more detail. Do not only say that people can use phones or sleep. Explain how this can make travel safer or easier.
coherence and cohesion
Use a simple four-part plan: introduction, good points, bad points, and conclusion. This will make your answer easier to follow.
coherence and cohesion
Start each body part with a clear main sentence. Then add an explanation and one example before you move to the next idea.
coherence and cohesion
Use link words in a clear way: “On the one hand”, “For example”, “However”, and “As a result”. Do not start too many sentences with “Although” or “Furthermore” when the link is not clear.
coherence and cohesion
Keep one point in each paragraph. The second body part moves between danger from human drivers and danger from driverless cars, so the main point is not clear.
coherence and cohesion
Make the conclusion match your view. At present, it says driverless cars have more good points, but it also ends by saying humans may react better. State your final view in one direct sentence.
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You give a clear view that driverless cars have more good points than bad points.
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You include ideas that fit the topic, such as tired drivers, road crashes, and people who drive after drinking.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has an introduction, two body parts, and a conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
You try to use link words such as “However”, “Therefore”, and “To conclude” to show the order of your ideas.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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