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you enjoy walking in the countryside near your home. However, you noting there is more and more litter left there by other walkers. write a letter to your local newspaper. In your letter say why you enjoy walking and where describe the litter you have seen on your walks suggest what might be done about the problem

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Dear Sir/Madam, I live at
kensigton road, sunnyside
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Kensington Road, Sunnyside,
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 and unlike many of my
neighbours
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neighbours,
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 my morning routine include to take a long walk
at
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in
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 my nearby area. Especially, the riely park
which
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, which
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 is very large and have variety of plants.
Since
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For the
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last
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 2
weeks
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weeks,
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 the amount of litter in the park
suddenly
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has suddenly
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 increased. Coffee cups
in
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are
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 lying on the benches, plastic bags
in
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are in
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 the middle of
sidewalk
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the sidewalk
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even
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, and even
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 glass bottles
in
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are in
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 the
gardenbed
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garden bed
.
Moreover
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,
these
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apply
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all
thing
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these things
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 are done by the people themselves who come to take a walk there. I request you to look at
this
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 issue and aware people about
this
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 condition of the
area
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area,
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 as your newspaper is followed by most individuals in the city. So citizens can control their actions
and
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, and
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 the litter waste can be reduced help to keep the environment safe Yours
faiithfully
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faithfully
 Aryan saini

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task response
Say more about why walking is good for you, such as fresh air, peace, or health. Give a clear idea of where the park is and why you like it.
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Your litter examples are clear. Add one or two more details about how this waste harms the park, people, or animals.
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Give clear ways to solve the problem. For example, ask for more bins, signs, park checks, and a clean-up day.
coherence and cohesion
Use a clear order: why you walk there, the litter problem, then your ideas to fix it. This order is mostly clear now.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words with care. Try: 'For example', 'As a result', and 'Therefore'. Make sure each sentence is complete.
coherence and cohesion
Keep one main point in each paragraph. The last paragraph should focus only on what the paper and local people can do.
coherence and cohesion
Check the start and end of the letter. Use capital letters in names and places, and write 'Yours faithfully' correctly.
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You answer all the main parts of the letter. You explain where you walk, list types of litter, and ask the newspaper to help.
coherence and cohesion
Your letter has three clear paragraphs, and the examples of cups, bags, and bottles make the problem easy to understand.
The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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