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The most important aim of science should be to improve people’lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement

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Introduction
There is no denying the
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aim
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people’s lives
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held
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science
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humans
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lives
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Body paragraph 1
There is no denying the
fact
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 that
important
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an important
show examples
aim
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 of
science
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 should be to improve
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people’
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people’s lives
lives
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.
While
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 it is a commonly
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heald
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held
belief
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 that
goal
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the goal
show examples
 of
science
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 should be to improve
Use synonyms
people
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’live,
There
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there
show examples
 is
also
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 an
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arugment
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argument
 that opposes it. In my
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opnion
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opinion
, I consider that
people
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 should be taught by
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self
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self-study
study
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 or in
school
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 because
science
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 plays an essential
role
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 in
humans
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lives
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.
Body paragraph 2
There is no denying the
fact
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 that
important
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an important
show examples
aim
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 of
science
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 should be to improve
Use synonyms
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people’
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people’s lives
lives
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.
While
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 it is a commonly
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heald
Correct your spelling
held
belief
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 that
goal
Correct article usage
the goal
show examples
 of
science
Use synonyms
 should be to improve
Use synonyms
people
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’live,
There
Fix capitalization
there
show examples
 is
also
Linking Words
 an
Use synonyms
arugment
Correct your spelling
argument
 that opposes it. In my
Use synonyms
opnion
Correct your spelling
opinion
, I consider that
people
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 should be taught by
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self
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self-study
study
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 or in
school
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 because
science
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 plays an essential
role
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 in
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humans
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human
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lives
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.
Body paragraph 3
There is no denying the
fact
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 that
important
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an important
show examples
aim
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 of
science
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 should be to improve
Use synonyms
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people’
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people’s lives
lives
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.
While
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 it is a commonly
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heald
Correct your spelling
held
belief
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 that
goal
Correct article usage
the goal
show examples
 of
science
Use synonyms
 should be to improve
Use synonyms
people
Use synonyms
’live,
There
Fix capitalization
there
show examples
 is
also
Linking Words
 an
Use synonyms
arugment
Correct your spelling
argument
 that opposes it. In my
Use synonyms
opnion
Correct your spelling
opinion
, I consider that
people
Use synonyms
 should be taught by
Use synonyms
self
Correct your spelling
self-study
study
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 or in
school
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 because
science
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 plays an essential
role
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 in
Use synonyms
humans
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human
show examples
lives
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.
Conclusion
There is no denying the
fact
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 that
important
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an important
show examples
aim
Use synonyms
 of
science
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 should be to improve
Use synonyms
Use synonyms
people’
Correct your spelling
people’s lives
lives
Use synonyms
.
While
Linking Words
 it is a commonly
Use synonyms
heald
Correct your spelling
held
belief
Use synonyms
 that
goal
Correct article usage
the goal
show examples
 of
science
Use synonyms
 should be to improve
Use synonyms
people
Use synonyms
’live,
There
Fix capitalization
there
show examples
 is
also
Linking Words
 an
Use synonyms
arugment
Correct your spelling
argument
 that opposes it. In my
Use synonyms
opnion
Correct your spelling
opinion
, I consider that
people
Use synonyms
 should be taught by
Use synonyms
self
Correct your spelling
self-study
study
Use synonyms
 or in
school
Use synonyms
 because
science
Use synonyms
 plays an essential
role
Use synonyms
 in
humans
Use synonyms
lives
Use synonyms
.

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task response
State your view clearly: agree, disagree, or partly agree. Your main point says people should study science at home or at school, but this does not answer the question about the aim of science.
task response
Give two or three clear reasons for your view. For example, science can help with health, food, clean water, travel, and safety.
task response
Add real examples. You could write about new drugs, clean energy, or farm tools that help people live better.
task response
Do not repeat the same paragraph. Write a short start, two main body parts with new ideas, and a final ending that repeats your view.
coherence and cohesion
Use a clear plan. Start with your answer, then give one main idea in each body part, and end with a short summary.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas with simple words such as “First”, “Also”, “For example”, “However”, and “In the end”.
coherence and cohesion
Make each paragraph do one job. At the moment, all five paragraphs have the same words and no new support.
coherence and cohesion
Check basic word forms and spelling, such as “people’s lives”, “the important aim”, “held”, “argument”, and “opinion”.
task response
You try to give your own view, and you say that science has an important place in human life.
coherence and cohesion
Your first sentence is linked to the topic, so the reader can see what subject you are writing about.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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