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You have recently completed an important course at a college. Your teacher helped you a lot during the course. Write a letter to your teacher. Thank your teacher for their help and support. Explain how their teaching helped you. Tell your teacher what you plan to do in the future.

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Dear Mr David, I hope you are doing well. I am writing to thank you for your guidance given on
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 English course. I would like to appreciate the help and support
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 which you have given to me for my IELTS course.
As a result
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 to pursue my dream of studying abroad. Thank you so much for your guidance. Your teaching techniques
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 a lot for me, the IELTS materials, resources and video lessons provided by you have changed my learning pattern.
Due to
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, my writing and speaking skills have improved. Now, I can speak fluently without any
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Yale University, and I am flying to the USA
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next week. I am planning to
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 in one of the English courses provided by the university, so that I can do regular study, and can learn some more advanced vocabulary, which will help me in future workplaces, and provide me
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 opportunities. Thank you for your time and
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. Thank you for everything. Yours sincerely, Jonathan

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Answer all three parts well. Add one clear example of how your teacher helped you, such as help with speaking or writing.
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Use more careful words in a few places. For example, say “I have received confirmation from Yale University” and “I am flying to the USA next week.”
coherence and cohesion
Your letter has a clear start, middle, and end. Link ideas with simple words such as “because”, “so”, and “therefore” where needed.
coherence and cohesion
Keep each paragraph on one main point. The last long paragraph can be split into two: one about Yale and one about your future study plan.
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You clearly thank your teacher, explain how the course helped you, and share your future plan.
coherence and cohesion
The greeting and closing are polite, and the letter is easy to follow.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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