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Below is a map of the city of Brandfield. City planners have decided to build a new shopping mall for the area, and two sites, S1 and S2 have been proposed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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Below is a map of the city of Brandfield. City planners have decided to build a new shopping mall for the area, and two sites, S1 and S2 have been proposed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The map illustrates two
propsoed
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proposed
 sites, S1 and S2
in
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, in
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 the
city
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 of Brandfield, for the
contrusction
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construction
 of the new shopping mall planned by
city
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 planners.
Overall
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, both proposed locations have access to the railway station and road, which can be convenient for the locals.
However
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, S1 is more centralise havin access to the housing
estate
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,
city
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 centre and
bit
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 away from
industrial
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the industrial
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estate
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,
wehereas
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whereas
 S2 is located at the very far end. Regarding
site
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 S1, it is located to the north of
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city
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the city
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 centre, near the housing
estate
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.
Golf
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The golf
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 course is located to the west of
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city
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the city
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 centre and
industrial
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the industrial
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estate
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 to the east, which makes visting
site
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 one much easier.
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,
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site
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the site
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to
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is located far away from
golf
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the golf
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 course and
housing
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the housing
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estate
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. It's south-east location makes it
only
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apply
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closer to the people who live in the
east
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eastern
 part of the
city
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which
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 is separated by
river
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the river
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. Even with a railway and road
access
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access,
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 the location is not good as compared to
site
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words city, estate, site with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proximity
  • residential area
  • industrial zone
  • city center
  • main road
  • benefits
  • convenience
  • traffic congestion
  • accessibility
  • workers
  • compare
  • differences
  • pros and cons
  • suitable
  • analysis
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