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You are renting an apartment. Write a letter to your landlord regarding a noise problem from your neighbors. Include the following in your letter: – What is the problem? – What have you done about it? – What would you like the landlord to do?

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Dear Sir/Madam, I hope
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 letter finds you well
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 I am writing to you with regard to the noise problem that happens every night from my front
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, I would like to express my anger about what my
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 do as they keep the
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music
 loud in the late hours
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 makes my windows shaking,
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,
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 noise really wakes me up the whole night, and
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 I couldn't wake up early for work.
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, I would like to inform you that I complained several times and talked to them personally
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, I got no solution or respect
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 they ignored my requests completely.
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, I would like to suggest that you
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 in
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 issue as you are the owner and give them a serious warning to stop
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 annoying music permenantly or just make them leave the property
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 all tenants will appreciate that. I am looking forward to your prompt reply. Yours sincerely, Adam White

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You answer all parts: the noise, what you did, and what you want the owner to do. Add a little more clear detail, such as the time the music starts and how often it happens.
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Use a calm, polite tone. Do not say you are angry or ask the owner to make the people leave at once. Ask for a warning and for help to solve the problem first.
coherence and cohesion
Your letter has a clear start, middle, and end. Use shorter sentences, as some sentences join too many ideas with commas.
coherence and cohesion
Keep each paragraph on one main point. The first can state the problem, the next can say what you have done, and the last can say what you want the owner to do.
coherence and cohesion
Use simple links such as 'However', 'As a result', and 'Therefore' to make the ideas flow clearly.
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You clearly say that loud music at night keeps you awake and affects your work.
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You explain that you spoke to your neighbors several times before writing to the owner.
coherence and cohesion
The greeting and closing are suitable for a formal letter.
coherence and cohesion
Words such as 'Firstly', 'Secondly', and 'Finally' help the reader follow your main points.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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