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Band 7.5

You have just heard some good news about your friend. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter • say how you heard the news • arrange a time to visit your friend at his/her house • explain what you will bring with you

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Dear Tina, I hope you’re doing well. It was great to hear the wonderful news about you. I am writing to congratulate you on your recent success and to let you know how happy I am for you.
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, I heard the news from our mutual friend, Sarah, who called me yesterday evening. She told me that you had
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 received your promotion at work. I was absolutely delighted to hear about it because I know how hard you have worked to achieve
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. Another thing I wanted to mention is that I would love to visit you at your house so that we can celebrate your achievement together. How about I come over
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 Saturday afternoon? I think it would be a perfect time because we will have plenty of time to catch up and celebrate.
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, I will bring a small gift and some homemade snacks with me. I am
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 thinking of bringing a bottle of your favourite juice and a cake so that we can celebrate your success together. I hope you’ll like them. Anyway, I hope to see you
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 Saturday. I’m really looking forward to celebrating
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 wonderful news with you. Take care and keep in touch. Best wishes, Sam

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task response
You cover all parts of the task well. To make the visit plan clearer, ask Tina to say if Saturday afternoon is good for her.
coherence and cohesion
Your letter is easy to follow, with clear parts for the news, the visit, and the gifts. You can make it sound more natural by using fewer linking words such as “Firstly”, “Another thing”, and “Finally”.
coherence and cohesion
Some ideas are said more than once, such as celebrating her success. You can cut one or two of these lines to make the letter shorter and stronger.
task response
You clearly say how you heard the news, suggest a day and time to visit, and explain what you will bring.
coherence and cohesion
The letter has a warm start and end, and each paragraph has a clear main point.
coherence and cohesion
The friendly tone is a good fit for a letter to a friend.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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