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Some people think that hosting an international sport event is good for the country. Another think that it is bad. Discuses both views and state your opinion

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Introduction
In today's world,
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People have
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people are
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 interested
on the
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in
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 international
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sport
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sports events
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event
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,
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also
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and
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 they find these sports very important and could produce profits.
While
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 another believes that it's not good.
Body paragraph 1
This
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 essay will explain the reasons for both views.
Body paragraph 2
On the one hand, there are many reasons why
people
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 prefer their
country
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 hosting an international
sport
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event
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 how hold
this
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 opinion. One of the most important
reason
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reasons
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 to
host
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 the international
sport
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 is
increase
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to increase
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a
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the
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 profit in
economic
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the economy
 and
a
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the
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 value
for
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of
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this
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country
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.
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,
USA
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the USA
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when
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, when
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organized
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organising
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 an international
sport
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, these
event
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 effect on federal treasury and businesses gain from,
such
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 as football
stadiums
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stadium
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 tickets, sales of food and beverages in public facilities, airline tickets, hotel bookings, and more.
Body paragraph 3
On the other hand
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, other
people
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 don't accept an idea
as
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apply
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to
host
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 any international events,
such
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 as football gaming.
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, they have important causes for rejection.
Additionally
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, they see
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the infrastructure
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their
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in their
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country
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not
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as not
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 appropriate to
host
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 a big
event
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.
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, Mexico
when
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, when
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hosted
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it hosted
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 FIFA in
2026
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2026,
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they can't
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couldn't
 provide a good service to
people
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 how coming from other countries, they came to
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see
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 the football
event
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but
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, but
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 they
didn't
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weren't
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 happy.
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, the
Mexico
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Mexican
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 worker had
bad
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a bad
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 working
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experience, because
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 there were many
crowded
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people crowded
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 on the street and
traffic
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the traffic
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unorganized
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was unorganised
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Finally
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, hosting the international
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sport
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sports
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event
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is depend
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depends
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 on the
structure
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structural
 capabilities
on
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of the
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country
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 who is
host
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 the
event
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.
While
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 I expect that
government
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the government
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 must be sure
if
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that
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 they had balance to
rise
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raise
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 the sustainability
on
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in
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 their
country
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 to provide a better
environmental
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environment
 for
community
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the community
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,
then
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 they think if it's good to
host
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 several events.
Conclusion
To sum up
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,
although
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 there are many causes
to
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for
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 these
people
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is
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apply
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reject or accept
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holding
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 the international
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sport
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sports
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event
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, the company must
be
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apply
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do
it
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apply
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more research and studies before hosting.

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task response
You discuss both sides and give your own view, which is good. However, make each side more clear. Explain why sport events can bring money, jobs, and visitors. Then explain why they can cost too much money or cause traffic and other problems.
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Your opinion is not fully clear. State it in one direct sentence, for example: “I believe a country should host such an event only if it has good roads, hotels, and enough public money.” Keep this same view in the end.
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Use examples that are true and clear. The Mexico example talks about a future event, so it cannot show what happened. You can use a general example instead: visitors may spend money on rooms, food, and travel.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear start, two main body parts, and an ending. To make the order better, begin with a direct answer to the question, then give one main idea in each body part.
coherence and cohesion
Some sentences are hard to follow because there are too many ideas together. Use short sentences. For example, write: “Large events can bring many visitors. These visitors spend money in hotels and shops. As a result, local business can grow.”
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words in a simple and correct way. “On the one hand” and “On the other hand” are useful. Do not use “However” many times in one part. Use “For example”, “As a result”, and “In contrast” when needed.
coherence and cohesion
Avoid repeating the same point in the final part. Your ending should briefly restate both views and your opinion, without adding new ideas about companies or studies.
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You answer all parts of the question: you write about the good side, the bad side, and your own view.
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You give useful ideas about money from tickets, food, hotels, and travel.
coherence and cohesion
You use clear paragraph signals, such as “On the one hand”, “On the other hand”, “Finally”, and “To sum up”.
coherence and cohesion
The essay has an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion, so the reader can see your main plan.
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