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Some people believe that it is good for students to have the same teacher for several years. Others think students benefit more from having new teachers each year. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

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Introduction
Many individuals presume that
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Body paragraph 1
On the one hand, some
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In addition
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want to prepare themself earlier to get
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, they
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On the other hand
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teacher
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, the reason is
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Conclusion
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will help them to know skills how the learn the new technique from new teachers.

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task response
You talk about both views and give your own view at the end. However, your own view is not clear enough. State early which view you support, then explain why.
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Give each main idea more detail. For the same teacher view, explain how the teacher knows the student’s needs and can make a long plan. For the new teacher view, explain how new ways of teaching may help.
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Your doctor example is not clear. Say how one teacher can help a student over three years, for example by seeing weak points and giving the right test work.
coherence and cohesion
Use a clear four-part plan: introduction, same teacher view, new teacher view, and conclusion. Your essay has this shape, but some ideas inside each part are hard to follow.
coherence and cohesion
Start each body part with one clear main sentence. Then add two linked reasons and one clear example. Do not put many ideas in one very long sentence.
coherence and cohesion
Use simple link words in a natural way: First, Also, For example, However, As a result, and In my view. Make sure each link shows the right relation between ideas.
coherence and cohesion
Check sentence form carefully. For example, write: 'Some people believe that changing teachers each year has advantages for students.' This is clearer than 'some people believe that offer advantages if replace with a new teacher each year to student.'
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You answer both parts of the question: keeping the same teacher and changing teachers each year.
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You include an example about students who want to study medicine, which shows an effort to support your idea.
coherence and cohesion
You use clear paragraph breaks for the two different views and a conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
You use some useful linking words, such as 'On the one hand', 'On the other hand', 'Moreover', and 'In conclusion'.
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