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You live in an English speaking country and you want to do some voluntary, unpaid work in a developing country. Write a letter to a company called Cultural Expeditions, which organizes such trips. In your letter: Explain why you want to do the voluntary work. State what your skills and experience are. Indicate where you would like to volunteer and for how long.

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
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 letter to express my interest in doing some voluntary work overseas
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through your company. Social work
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 my hobby
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 since my school days. These
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 of assignments help to learn about new cultures, and teach others vice-versa. My current job is with provisional University, and I am assigned
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 international students, so they can settle in our society. I have been tutoring newcomers
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from
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 eight years. I believe that my exposure to people from different nationalities can be a crucial tool
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 for your company projects. I have been waiting for
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 oppurtunity from long period, and my interest is in teaching English in rural Africa. I believe that your company, Cultural
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 will be my best chance to do something fruitful for these kids. I hope to
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 from
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 very soon. Yours truly, S

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Explain more clearly why you want to help. Give one or two real reasons, such as helping children learn or seeing how people live.
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State the time you can give. For example, say that you would like to work for four weeks or three months.
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Your skills are clear, but add more detail about what you can teach and how you can help children.
coherence and cohesion
Your letter has a clear start, middle, and end. Make the links between ideas smoother with words such as also, because, and therefore.
coherence and cohesion
Keep each paragraph on one main point: why you want to go, your work skills, and the place and time you want.
coherence and cohesion
Use a more formal ending, such as “I look forward to hearing from you.” Avoid phrases like “listen from yours end.”
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You clearly say that you want to teach English in rural Africa, and you give useful work experience with new students.
coherence and cohesion
The greeting and closing are suitable, and the letter is easy to follow with separate paragraphs.
The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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