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many people think that plastic hurts people. Others think it is very useful. Give both points of view

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Introduction
The diagram below shows what plastic
bottles
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 go through during their simple life span.
Body paragraph 1
Overview
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 The cycle includes harvesting, extracting, fermenting, creating, recycling, and wasting of the
bottles
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. The
bottles
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 are created using a long process
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 they start off as
cereal
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a cereal
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 where the glucose is taken and turned into polymers
which
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, which
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is
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 the plastic itself. After being used, they are either recycled or turned
to
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into
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 waste.
Overall
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,
It
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it
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 is a simple process which takes time and manpower.
Body paragraph 2
The
bottles
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 are created by harvesting cereal,
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then
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and then
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 an extraction of glucose from it takes place.
This
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 glucose is
then
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 fermented into polymers
which
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, which
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is
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 the
material
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materials
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 that plastic is made out of. With the material produced, the shape of the bottle is formed.
Conclusion
Now, the
bottles
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 have certainly been constructed. After
the
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its
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 use
of it
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, it is to be thrown into a trash bin of some sort.
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 is the final step of the bottle's life
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 it is now either taken to a landfill or recycled to make more polymer.

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task response
Make sure your essay matches the task. This is a process diagram, so describe all main stages in the right order. Do not add ideas that are not shown in the diagram, such as cereal, glucose, or fermentation, unless they are clearly in it.
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Give a clear overview with the main start and end points. For example, say that bottles are made, used, and then either recycled or sent away as waste.
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Add more key steps from the diagram. Explain what happens after bottles are put in the bin and how recycled bottles become new bottles.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has clear paragraphs: an opening, the making stage, and the end stage. Keep this order, but make each paragraph cover all steps from that part of the process.
coherence and cohesion
Use simple linking words to show order, such as “First”, “Next”, “After that”, “Then”, and “Finally”. This will make the process easier to follow.
coherence and cohesion
Avoid repeating the same idea. The overview says the process is simple, but it does not help the reader understand the main stages. Use the overview to sum up the whole cycle instead.
task response
You identify the main idea that used bottles have two possible ends: recycling or waste.
coherence and cohesion
The writing follows a time order, from making the bottle to throwing it away.
coherence and cohesion
You use separate paragraphs for different parts of the process, which helps the reader.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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