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As it is now possible for computers and smartphones to translate multiple languages quickly and accurately, learning a foreign language is a waste of time. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Introduction
In recent years,
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because
 of
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advancement
 in
technology
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translating
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, translating
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 any
language
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 to our mother tongue has become very easy. Computers and
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modern
 phones are now capable of translating many languages efficently but I still believe that learning a new
language
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 is not a waste of time and can help
people
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 in various ways, from their career development to building
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connections
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 with
people
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 form divers culture.
Body paragraph 1
Even though
technology
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 has made it easier to translate any
laguage
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language
, learning to speak a new
language
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 will never go to waste. Many
people
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 who can speak a foreign
language
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 get an opportunity to grow their career and get to experience living abroad. Companies operate worldwide
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 they are
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constantly
 looking for
people
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 who can fluently speak the local
languaue
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language
 and help them grow their business in that particular
county
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country
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, where
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 is not their first
language
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. It is very necessary in
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scenario
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a scenario
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 for
people
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 to actually speak that
language
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 during their stay in
foreign
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a foreign
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 country. Depending on smartphone translation will not help them build
relationship
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a relationship
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 with
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the local
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 community.
Body paragraph 2
Moreover
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, there are some
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limitations
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 when it comes to
technology
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. Relying too much on
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modern
 applications can cause serious issues as well.
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, learning a new
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 is not that important when visiting a foreign country for
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a short
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 stay
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 it is still recommended to have some basic familarity of that
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.
While
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 travelling
many
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, many
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 times
people
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 face network
issue
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issues
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 and
mobile
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their mobile
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phone works
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phones work
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 only when they are charged, in these situations relying on
technology
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 can cause serious
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trouble
.
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result
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result,
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people
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 can get lost in an unknown country and have
difficulites
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difficulties
while
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 communicating with locals.
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, having a bit of understanding of a new
language
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 is very crucial and can never be harmful.
Conclusion
In conclusion, learning a
languaue
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language
 has its own benefits and is never considered a waste of time.
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Language
 is a means of communication and is very
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important
 to
develope
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develop
 relationships with diverse
people
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.
Technology
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 is designed to help us get closer to
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achieving
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but
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 it does not eliminate the need of learning a new
language
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.
Hence
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, I strongly disagree with the above statement.

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task response
State your view more directly in the first paragraph. Say clearly that you strongly disagree, then give the two main reasons you will explain.
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Your main ideas are relevant: work, life abroad, and problems with phone use. To make them stronger, explain more fully how language skills build trust, help at work, and show respect for local people.
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Use one clear, real-world example. For example, a worker who speaks the local language can talk to clients without waiting for an app. This will make your points more convincing.
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Deal more closely with the words 'quickly and accurately' in the question. Explain that even good translation cannot fully show tone, feelings, jokes, or shared culture.
coherence and cohesion
The essay has a clear order: introduction, two body paragraphs, and conclusion. Keep this plan, but make the first sentence of each body paragraph state one main idea in a short and clear way.
coherence and cohesion
Some sentences are very long and hold several ideas. Break them into shorter sentences so the reader can follow your meaning more easily.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words with care. Words such as 'Moreover', 'For instance', and 'As a result' are helpful, but make sure the next sentence clearly follows from the one before it.
coherence and cohesion
Avoid repeating 'new language', 'technology', and 'foreign country' too often. You can use simple other words such as 'it', 'this skill', 'apps', or 'another country' when the meaning is clear.
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You answer the question directly and keep the same view from the start to the end: learning another language is still useful.
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Your ideas are on topic and practical. The points about jobs, living abroad, and phone or network problems fit the question well.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay is easy to follow because it has a clear introduction, two main body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
You use helpful signposts, such as 'Even though', 'Moreover', 'For instance', and 'In conclusion', to guide the reader.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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