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Many people think it is very important to protect the environment but they make no effort to do it themselves. Why do you think this is the case? What actions should individuals take to protect the environment?

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Introduction
Many people acknowledge the importance of protecting the environment, yet relatively few are willing to change their own behaviour to achieve
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 essay will discuss the reasons for
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 contradiction and suggest several actions that the public can take to reduce environmental damage.
Body paragraph 1
One major reason why communities fail to act is that environmental problems are often perceived as distant or beyond the control of human beings. Issues
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 as climate change, deforestation and pollution are global in scale, which can lead people to believe that their personal choices will have little impact.
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, environmentally friendly choices can sometimes be less convenient or more expensive than conventional alternatives.
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, using public transport may take longer than driving,
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 sustainable products can cost more.
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, a nation may support environmental protection in principle but prioritise convenience and personal interests in their daily lives.
Body paragraph 2
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, individuals can take a number of practical steps to reduce their environmental impact.
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they can limit their consumption of resources by reducing unnecessary purchases, reusing products and recycling household waste.
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the community can choose more sustainable forms of transport,
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 as walking, cycling or using public transportation,
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 of relying heavily on private cars. They can
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 reduce energy consumption by using energy-efficient appliances and avoiding unnecessary heating, cooling and lighting.
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 these actions may appear insignificant when taken individually, their collective impact can be substantial if adopted by a large proportion of the population.
Conclusion
In conclusion, the gap between society's environmental concerns and its behaviour is largely caused by the perception that individual actions have little effect,
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 the inconvenience or cost associated with sustainable choices.
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, by changing their consumption habits, reducing waste and using resources and transport more responsibly, human beings can make a meaningful contribution to environmental protection.

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Task response
Answer both parts clearly, as you do here. To make the answer stronger, add one more clear reason why people do not act, such as a lack of time, habit, or weak rules from leaders.
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Your actions are useful and on topic. Give one short real-life example for one action. For example, say how taking a bus or buying less plastic can cut waste or air harm.
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Be careful with group words. “A nation may support” and “the community can choose” sound broad. “People” or “individuals” fits the question better.
Coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear four-part shape: opening, reasons, actions, and ending. Keep this plan in future essays.
Coherence and cohesion
The links between ideas are clear. You can make the reason part flow even better by showing the order: people first feel their act does not matter, then choose the easier or cheaper way.
Coherence and cohesion
Avoid using the same group words too often, such as “communities”, “the public”, “the community”, and “human beings”. Use “people” or “individuals” more often for a smoother flow.
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You fully deal with the two key points: why people fail to act and what they can do. Your ideas stay focused on the environment.
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The points about cost, ease, travel, waste, and energy are clear and useful. The public transport example helps explain your point.
Coherence and cohesion
Each main paragraph has one clear job, and the ending brings the main ideas together well.
Coherence and cohesion
You use simple linking words well, such as “In addition”, “For example”, “First”, “Second”, and “However”.
Your opinion

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