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In many countries, people do not recycle waste materials, such as bottles and newspapers. What are the reason for this? What could be done to solve this problem?

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Introduction
In some countries, recycling is a common
culture
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 among the population , particularly in developed countries.
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this
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 trend is not really popular in various
part
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 of the
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,
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 the lack of environmental knowledge and economic resources.
This
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 essay will illustrate the reasons behind
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 phenomenon and will suggest some practical solutions.
Body paragraph 1
To initiate with the reasons, lack of proper understanding of the environment is consider on of the major reasons. It is obvious that the positive impact of recycling
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waste materials is not a priority in the education system in those parts of the world.
Chidren
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 are not taught the basics about the dangerous
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effects
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 of plastic bottles on the soil and the water resources, so
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the effort of recycling is missing in
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, some economies are very fragile to stand the cost of
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transferring waste
 material into other products. It is more
cost effective
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cost-effective
 for
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 economies to produce paper, rather than to recycle newspapers.
Body paragraph 2
There are many practical
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 which should be considered to overcome
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enviromental
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environmental
 issue. First of all, awareness about the importance of waste materials among the population must be increased.
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, topics about protecting the local nature can be obligatory at educational
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institutions
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 step will
difinitely enhace
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definitely enhance
 the motivation among younger generations to collect plastic bottles
seperatly
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separately
 to be recycled.
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, providing loans to establish companies dealing with waste materials in third world countries, will be a great movement towards the protection of the
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environment
.
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 a step can be helpful not just for the natural
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, but
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 for the economy of that part of the world.
Conclusion
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conclusion
, governments and
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global
 institutions should cooperate to enhance the
awereness
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awareness
 of the importance of recycling and provide
finincial
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financial
 support if necessary.

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task response
You answer both parts of the task: why people do not recycle and what can be done. Your two main reasons are clear: limited knowledge and lack of money or industry.
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Develop each reason with a more direct link to people’s daily choices. For example, explain that people may not recycle when there are no bins or collection points near their homes.
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Your idea about loans is useful, but explain who gives the loans, who gets them, and how this leads to more recycling. This will make the solution more complete.
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Use one clear, real-life example for each main point. For instance, schools can teach children to sort paper, glass, and plastic, while local councils can put separate bins in public places.
coherence and cohesion
The essay has a clear order: introduction, reasons, solutions, and conclusion. This makes it easy to follow.
coherence and cohesion
Keep the same focus in each paragraph. In the first body paragraph, the point about weak economies is useful, but it needs a clearer link to why ordinary people do not recycle.
coherence and cohesion
Use simple linking words carefully, such as “First”, “Also”, “For example”, “As a result”, and “Finally”. Avoid long opening phrases like “To initiate with the reasons” when a short link is clearer.
coherence and cohesion
Make the conclusion match the body more closely. Mention better education, recycling bins and collection, and money support, so all key ideas are brought together.
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The essay stays on the topic and gives both causes and solutions.
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The school education idea is clear and fits the problem well.
coherence and cohesion
Each body paragraph has a main purpose, and the conclusion gives a short final view.
coherence and cohesion
Words such as “However”, “In addition”, “For instance”, and “Secondly” help show the movement between ideas.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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