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The table gives information about the three countries with the highest populations.

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The table gives information about the three countries with the highest populations.
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dipicts
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depicts
 data about three nations with the largest populations.the measured in
billion
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billions
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 and
ratio
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ratios
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 and
million
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millions
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 and
kilometre
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kilometres
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.
Overall
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,
while
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 the most remarkable increase was in
China
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 ,
Which
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which
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 clearly surpassed all the
others point
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other points
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 by a substantial margin,the reverse was true for
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USA
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the USA
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which
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, which
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 took the lowest position during the given period. In terms of the leading
country
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country,
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China
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 accounted for the highest category with a
1.415 billion population
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population of 1.415 billion
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,
had
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and had
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 a gently grew to 0.39% since 2017.
India
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 had a
sky rocked
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skyrocked
 to 1.11% since 2017.
China
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 Density people per
suquare was lower than
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square was lower than India's
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India
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 .
In addition
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,
Land
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the land
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 area for
china
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 singificantly more than
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India
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that of India
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However
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,the Urban population in
India
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nearly
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was nearly
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third
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a third
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was
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apply
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less than
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China
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that of China
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just
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, just
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 over
haIf
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half
. Regarding
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USA
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the USA
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stood
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, which stood
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at
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in
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 the
last
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 category,the increase was about 0.71% since 2017.
Moreover
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,
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USA
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the USA
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 was the most dominant
at Urban
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in urban
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 population
like
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, like
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 almost three quarters .the Land area of the
USA
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 was almost similar to that
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India
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of India
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 .
Density people
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The density
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 of the
USA
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 was the lowest share.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words china, usa, india with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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