Write a letter to a friend about an item you borrowed last week, that accidentally got damaged. In your letter – Describe the item. – What was the damage? – What do you intend to do to rectify the problem?

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Dear Ali, I’m writing to let you know about a problem with your
laptop
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I borrowed
last
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week. Unfortunately, the
laptop
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broke down
while
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I was browsing
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the internet. At that moment, I came across an advertisement that explained how to make a mobile application easily on my own.
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, when I clicked on the link that was provided, I faced an error message. Afterwards, the
laptop
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restarted, and
then
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I faced a blue screen containing information, which explained that Windows on the
laptop
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had crashed because some important files were missing. To address
this
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issue, I contacted a friend who is an expert in Technology. He explained that the problem can be caused by a computer virus, and you have to reinstall the windows. But it can be possible to lose your significant data. If you’d like, I can take your
laptop
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to him and ask him to fix it I am really sorry about the situation, and I promise I'll get it fixed as soon as possible. I look forward to hearing from you. Take care, Mohammadreza

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Say more clearly what you will do. For example, say you will pay for the repair or buy a new laptop if it cannot be fixed.
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The damage is clear, but you can add one short line about how it happened to show care and be more direct.
coherence and cohesion
Your letter has a clear start, middle, and end. Make the repair plan easier to read by using short, direct sentences.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words such as “so”, “because”, and “therefore” to show the link between the virus, the crash, and your plan.
coherence and cohesion
End the sentence “ask him to fix it” with a full stop.
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You describe the laptop, explain the problem, and give a plan to fix it.
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The sorry tone is kind and right for a letter to a friend.
coherence and cohesion
Each main part has its own paragraph, so the letter is easy to follow.
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The greeting and closing fit a friendly letter well.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • borrowed item
  • a brand-new camera
  • in excellent condition
  • use it for a few days
  • accidental damage
  • slipped out of my hand
  • fell onto the floor
  • a cracked screen
  • a damaged lens
  • a broken handle
  • a deep scratch
  • feel terribly sorry
  • take full responsibility
  • get it repaired
  • a reliable repair shop
  • cover the repair costs
  • pay for the damage
  • replace it with a new one
  • make it up to you
  • hope you can forgive me
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